Title : College Student depression In this unit, you will conduct in-depth research into your topic, read your research sources, and compile them together, with your own commentary, into an annotated bibliography. Your annotated bibliography should have ten total sources with at least three different types (scholarly articles, City Resolution minutes, interviews, books, magazines, governmental websites, NGO reports, etc.).
These sources should include your preliminary sources (those included on the proposal) as well as those you have compiled subsequently.
For each source, you must include:
1) An APA-style reference entry, properly formatted according to the APA guide;
2) A brief, one-paragraph annotation that summarizes the source in one or two sentences and then notes how you plan to use it in your video podcast. These annotations should truly be brief – the goal here is to help you take stock of your sources and determine how you will use them, not to create an onerous assignment.
I need to citations for title
Annotated Bibliography
By
Student
IGED210C Discovery Expository Writing
Date Submitted
Working Thesis Statement
Include your working thesis statement here. While not technically part of an annotated bibliography, keeping your thesis in mind while researching will make this process much more helpful.
Annotated Bibliography
Main Strand/Idea One: State the first main idea from your thesis.
Source One: APA-Style Reference
Source One: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Two: APA-Style Reference
Source Two: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Three: APA-Style Reference
Source Three: 1-paragraph annotation
Main Strand/Idea Two: State the second main idea from your thesis.
Source Four: APA-Style Reference
Source Four: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Five: APA-Style Reference
Source Five: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Six: APA-Style Reference
Source Six: 1-paragraph annotation
Main Strand/Idea Three: State the third main idea from your thesis.
Source Seven: APA-Style Reference
Source Seven: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Eight: APA-Style Reference
Source Eight: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Nine: APA-Style Reference
Source Nine: 1-paragraph annotation
Additional Main Strand/Ideas: Continue on if you have more strands. Keep in mind that you will only have time for 3-4 chunks or segments in your vidro
Source Ten: APA-style Reference
Source Ten: 1-paragraph annotation
Running head: MEMO 1
MEMO
Jasmin Linthicum
Professor Aguiar
Discovery Writing
02/23/2022
Title: College student depression
College student depression has been an issue that most of our students are fighting against
within themselves. Anxiety is among the top concerns amongst our college students and it is an
issue that needs urgent actions to be taken. I decided to talk about this problem because the school
realized that most students are recording absenteeism and low grades. It is important to address this
issue because Following research done, 40% of our students are in depression.the st
Anxiety, relationship troubles, lack of sleep, poor diets and eating habits, and a lack of
regular workouts are some of the major causes of student sadness, according to study conducted by
the management. These aren’t the sole causes of depression, therefore it’s critical to involve our
children in discussions that allow them to open up about their issues.
Having a high number of students suffering from depression is very disappointing. The
future of our nation depends on our students and being in our college it is our responsibility to help
them out. Most of the students have been having difficulty in concentration, their performances
have dropped, some will always look exhausted, and some have joined alcoholism. This is a result
of depression that the college students are going through. The impact of depression not only affects
Christian Aguiar
This paragraph repeats some of the earlier ideas; instead of repeating those ideas, this would be a good place to answer the third part of the prompt: What disciplinary lenses will you use?
Christian Aguiar
It can be a little confusing, but for a memo you would NOT indent the paragraphs – it’s business writing – but for your proposal you WILL.
Christian Aguiar
In your preliminary research for the proposal, these are the types of issues you will need to find research backing for.
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
I’m a little confused, Jasmin – who is the management? Are you imagining that this is a memo you’re writing at work?
Christian Aguiar
You make a good case in this first paragraph for the importance of your topic.
Christian Aguiar
Wow, this is a shocking number. Be sure to include the source here, Jasmin, just like we discussed in class.
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Good use of the memo format, Jasmin
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
That’s okay, but the research itself would need to be real, so this information must come from an actual study that you cite.
MEMO 2
the school performances but also the mental ability of our students. They are constantly in a
subconscious state with themselves.
This memo is to call upon every staff to help our students overcome depression and
anxiety. This can be possible if we create more time to interact and offer a listening hear to them.
Through this, they will feel comfortable and will be able to speak out about the problems they face.
Thank you.
Christian Aguiar
I like the creativity here, Jasmin. For the memo assignment, though, you need to talk about your own plans for this class. Are you perhaps going to help your audience understand how to support students struggling with depression?
1
CollegeStudent’s Depression
Jasmin Linthicum
Course Discovery Writing
Professor Aguiar
Date Due 02/24/202
2
College Student’s Depression
2
According to the World Health Organization (WHO), depression is a common and severe
health issue that affects how someone feels, thinks and acts. The most common symptoms of
depression are; having bad moods and feeling very sad, losing interest in the activities that were
once fun, loss of appetite, which in turn will lead to massive weight loss or gain that is not related
to dieting and difficulty in concentrating, thinking or making decisions (LeMoult & Gotlib, 2019).
People become depressed due to various factors; some of the significant social factors that
bring about depression include; encountering traumatic events, separation from parents or
caregivers and being bullied. Personality some people are inclined towards experiencing
depression. For instance, people who tend to hold worries, have a low-self-esteem, are
perfectionists and are very sensitive towards negative criticism naturally have a higher likelihood
of facing depression.
Depression throughout history has always been a health problem for people. According to
articles written by philosophers and writers throughout humanity’s history, there is depression,
which is a health condition. The articles also include some of the continuous struggles that have
been made to find a solution on treating this condition. For instance, the ancient Greeks and
Romans had different thinking on depression. Some of the literature shows that the Greeks had a
notion that depression was a form of evil spirit possession and used exorcism techniques like;
beatings and starvation as “treatments” to cure a person. On the other hand, the Romans thought
depression was a combination of biological and psychological issues and employed gymnastics,
special diet, herbal medicine and music to treat the patients (Taquet et al., 2020).
In our present day, some of the startling statistics concerning depression are; depression
affects approximately one in fifteen adults, that is close to 6.8% annually, and a projection of an
estimated one in six persons will encounter depression at a given point in their life, that is around
Christian Aguiar
All of these statistics come from research, so you need to cite them using an in-text citation like we learned in class. Luckily, we’re reviewing them again today (3/17).
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
This is another place where you need to cite your source. Which literature tells us this?
Christian Aguiar
I like the historical context, Jasmin. This could be a great way to begin the script for your video, too.
Christian Aguiar
Since this is an argument based on research – it draws on what scientists know about depression – you need to make it clear what the source is.
Christian Aguiar
Do you mean “personally, some people are inclined…” or perhaps that “some people’s personalities are inclined”?
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Remember, the colon (:) introduces a list like this; the semicolon (;) connects two complete thoughts.
Christian Aguiar
Great context, Jasmin. For your reader to understand your topic, they will need to first understand what depression is. This is a strong opening move.
Christian Aguiar
3
16.7%. Studies show that females are more likely to experience depression compared to the men.
Clinicians have also found that depression is more likely to occur during the late teens to mid-20s.
This age group indicates that college students are the ones who are likely to suffer most from the
effect of depression.
Depression in college students has affected their social life adversely by lowering their
mood, feelings and self-esteem. It has also affected their school life by; making it challenging to
handle their schoolwork and losing interest in activities like sports. It has led to emotional
outbursts such as anger, faulty self-assessments, and lack of energy. Some of the statistics that
show the extent of this problem are; the overall rate of college students that have been reported to
have depression is about 45% (Moeller & Seehuus,
2019).
Suicide has become the third leading cause of death among college students; 76% of those
reported depression. Their first encounter was their mid-20, and nearly two-thirds of students who
developed substance abuse issues reported experiencing depression. These statistics indicate that
this is a significant health crisis among college students.
Another significant factor that makes this a significant issue is that close to 75% of the
students experiencing depression are reluctant to seek help and medication. This brings about an
additional risk of harmful outcomes like; dropping out of college, performing poorly academically,
the risk of substance abuse and a high chance of committing suicide in the event of a full
depression (Ramón-Arbués et al., 2020).
Depression among college students is a serious mental issue that affects in a big way how
the student thinks and behaves and can lead to significant emotional, functional and physical
issues. So it is crucial to understand the causes and effects of this issue among the students and
how it can be treated and even prevented.
Christian Aguiar
Same here, Jasmin. What does this evidence suggest about what might be lacking in colleges, or what college students need?
Christian Aguiar
Before continuing with more evidence, Jasmin, you should explain the significance of this evidence. Do college students need more help? More support?
Christian Aguiar
Can you find a study on how depression impacts schoolwork or activities?
Christian Aguiar
Can you find a scholarly study that explores WHY students might be reluctant to seek help? Are all students equally reluctant? Are there factors that influence them?
Christian Aguiar
I’ve underlined two sections that are both, in a sense, working thesis statements. I think this second one would work better, as it provides an argument you can develop step by step.
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Is this perhaps a continuation of the “some of the statistics” line above? If so, it needs to be in the same paragraph, Jasmin, otherwise your reader will get confused as I have here.
Christian Aguiar
Since there’s just one stat here, it would make more sense to present it directly.
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
This is a strong link between the background and the working thesis, which comes in the next paragraph.
Christian Aguiar
4
Some of the research approaches that can be employed to be able to identify depression in
college students include; getting help from the parents, this is by developing an approach of getting
to know from different parents on the well-being of the child, to be able to assess some of the most
common symptoms that could show depression. This is an essential aspect as it will be easier also
to train the parent on how to handle and provide support if the child is undergoing depression,
through; preparing the child for the unexpected, the importance of staying close, encouraging
healthy habits and developing a plan that is focused on student mental health (Park & Zarate Jr,
2019).
Another research method is designing a purpose design questionnaire that includes records
of sociodemographic data, such as; age, sex, year of study and performance in studies. The
questionnaire will consist of questions that will help measure the rate of depression among the
students. A number of colleges will be picked and select representatives to participate and increase
statistical power. To increase the accuracy of the research, it is essential to ensure that there is a
proportional stratified sampling of the colleges so that all the different age groups are represented.
Also, in the sampling process, the number of representatives to be obtained from each college will
be determined by calculations and proportional to size probability.
References
LeMoult, J., & Gotlib, I. H. (2019). Depression: A cognitive perspective. Clinical Psychology
Review, 69, 51-66.
Christian Aguiar
These aren’t quite research approaches, Jasmin – research approaches would be your lenses, like psychological or educational impacts. These are solutions you could propose.
5
Moeller, R. W., & Seehuus, M. (2019). Loneliness as a mediator for college students’ social skills
and experiences of depression and anxiety. Journal of adolescence, 73, 1-13.
Park, L. T., & Zarate Jr, C. A. (2019). Depression in the primary care setting. New England
Journal of Medicine, 380(6), 559-568.
Ramón-Arbués, E., Gea-Caballero, V., Granada-López, J. M., Juárez-Vela, R., Pellicer-García, B.,
& Antón-Solanas, I. (2020). The prevalence of depression, anxiety and stress and their
associated factors in college students. International Journal of Environmental Research and
Public Health, 17(19), 7001.
Taquet, M., Quoidbach, J., Gross, J. J., Saunders, K. E., & Goodwin, G. M. (2020). Mood
homeostasis, low mood, and history of depression in 2 large population samples. JAMA
Psychiatry, 77(9), 944-951.
Annotated Bibliography
By
Student
IGED210C Discovery Expository Writing
Date Submitted
Working Thesis Statement
Include your working thesis statement here. While not technically part of an annotated bibliography, keeping your thesis in mind while researching will make this process much more helpful.
Annotated Bibliography
Main Strand/Idea One: State the first main idea from your thesis.
Source One: APA-Style Reference
Source One: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Two: APA-Style Reference
Source Two: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Three: APA-Style Reference
Source Three: 1-paragraph annotation
Main Strand/Idea Two: State the second main idea from your thesis.
Source Four: APA-Style Reference
Source Four: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Five: APA-Style Reference
Source Five: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Six: APA-Style Reference
Source Six: 1-paragraph annotation
Main Strand/Idea Three: State the third main idea from your thesis.
Source Seven: APA-Style Reference
Source Seven: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Eight: APA-Style Reference
Source Eight: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Nine: APA-Style Reference
Source Nine: 1-paragraph annotation
Additional Main Strand/Ideas: Continue on if you have more strands. Keep in mind that you will only have time for 3-4 chunks or segments in your vidro
Source Ten: APA-style Reference
Source Ten: 1-paragraph annotation
Running head: MEMO 1
MEMO
Jasmin Linthicum
Professor Aguiar
Discovery Writing
02/23/2022
Title: College student depression
College student depression has been an issue that most of our students are fighting against
within themselves. Anxiety is among the top concerns amongst our college students and it is an
issue that needs urgent actions to be taken. I decided to talk about this problem because the school
realized that most students are recording absenteeism and low grades. It is important to address this
issue because Following research done, 40% of our students are in depression.the st
Anxiety, relationship troubles, lack of sleep, poor diets and eating habits, and a lack of
regular workouts are some of the major causes of student sadness, according to study conducted by
the management. These aren’t the sole causes of depression, therefore it’s critical to involve our
children in discussions that allow them to open up about their issues.
Having a high number of students suffering from depression is very disappointing. The
future of our nation depends on our students and being in our college it is our responsibility to help
them out. Most of the students have been having difficulty in concentration, their performances
have dropped, some will always look exhausted, and some have joined alcoholism. This is a result
of depression that the college students are going through. The impact of depression not only affects
Christian Aguiar
This paragraph repeats some of the earlier ideas; instead of repeating those ideas, this would be a good place to answer the third part of the prompt: What disciplinary lenses will you use?
Christian Aguiar
It can be a little confusing, but for a memo you would NOT indent the paragraphs – it’s business writing – but for your proposal you WILL.
Christian Aguiar
In your preliminary research for the proposal, these are the types of issues you will need to find research backing for.
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
I’m a little confused, Jasmin – who is the management? Are you imagining that this is a memo you’re writing at work?
Christian Aguiar
You make a good case in this first paragraph for the importance of your topic.
Christian Aguiar
Wow, this is a shocking number. Be sure to include the source here, Jasmin, just like we discussed in class.
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Good use of the memo format, Jasmin
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
That’s okay, but the research itself would need to be real, so this information must come from an actual study that you cite.
MEMO 2
the school performances but also the mental ability of our students. They are constantly in a
subconscious state with themselves.
This memo is to call upon every staff to help our students overcome depression and
anxiety. This can be possible if we create more time to interact and offer a listening hear to them.
Through this, they will feel comfortable and will be able to speak out about the problems they face.
Thank you.
Christian Aguiar
I like the creativity here, Jasmin. For the memo assignment, though, you need to talk about your own plans for this class. Are you perhaps going to help your audience understand how to support students struggling with depression?
1
CollegeStudent’s Depression
Jasmin Linthicum
Course Discovery Writing
Professor Aguiar
Date Due 02/24/202
2
College Student’s Depression
2
According to the World Health Organization (WHO), depression is a common and severe
health issue that affects how someone feels, thinks and acts. The most common symptoms of
depression are; having bad moods and feeling very sad, losing interest in the activities that were
once fun, loss of appetite, which in turn will lead to massive weight loss or gain that is not related
to dieting and difficulty in concentrating, thinking or making decisions (LeMoult & Gotlib, 2019).
People become depressed due to various factors; some of the significant social factors that
bring about depression include; encountering traumatic events, separation from parents or
caregivers and being bullied. Personality some people are inclined towards experiencing
depression. For instance, people who tend to hold worries, have a low-self-esteem, are
perfectionists and are very sensitive towards negative criticism naturally have a higher likelihood
of facing depression.
Depression throughout history has always been a health problem for people. According to
articles written by philosophers and writers throughout humanity’s history, there is depression,
which is a health condition. The articles also include some of the continuous struggles that have
been made to find a solution on treating this condition. For instance, the ancient Greeks and
Romans had different thinking on depression. Some of the literature shows that the Greeks had a
notion that depression was a form of evil spirit possession and used exorcism techniques like;
beatings and starvation as “treatments” to cure a person. On the other hand, the Romans thought
depression was a combination of biological and psychological issues and employed gymnastics,
special diet, herbal medicine and music to treat the patients (Taquet et al., 2020).
In our present day, some of the startling statistics concerning depression are; depression
affects approximately one in fifteen adults, that is close to 6.8% annually, and a projection of an
estimated one in six persons will encounter depression at a given point in their life, that is around
Christian Aguiar
All of these statistics come from research, so you need to cite them using an in-text citation like we learned in class. Luckily, we’re reviewing them again today (3/17).
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
This is another place where you need to cite your source. Which literature tells us this?
Christian Aguiar
I like the historical context, Jasmin. This could be a great way to begin the script for your video, too.
Christian Aguiar
Since this is an argument based on research – it draws on what scientists know about depression – you need to make it clear what the source is.
Christian Aguiar
Do you mean “personally, some people are inclined…” or perhaps that “some people’s personalities are inclined”?
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Remember, the colon (:) introduces a list like this; the semicolon (;) connects two complete thoughts.
Christian Aguiar
Great context, Jasmin. For your reader to understand your topic, they will need to first understand what depression is. This is a strong opening move.
Christian Aguiar
3
16.7%. Studies show that females are more likely to experience depression compared to the men.
Clinicians have also found that depression is more likely to occur during the late teens to mid-20s.
This age group indicates that college students are the ones who are likely to suffer most from the
effect of depression.
Depression in college students has affected their social life adversely by lowering their
mood, feelings and self-esteem. It has also affected their school life by; making it challenging to
handle their schoolwork and losing interest in activities like sports. It has led to emotional
outbursts such as anger, faulty self-assessments, and lack of energy. Some of the statistics that
show the extent of this problem are; the overall rate of college students that have been reported to
have depression is about 45% (Moeller & Seehuus,
2019).
Suicide has become the third leading cause of death among college students; 76% of those
reported depression. Their first encounter was their mid-20, and nearly two-thirds of students who
developed substance abuse issues reported experiencing depression. These statistics indicate that
this is a significant health crisis among college students.
Another significant factor that makes this a significant issue is that close to 75% of the
students experiencing depression are reluctant to seek help and medication. This brings about an
additional risk of harmful outcomes like; dropping out of college, performing poorly academically,
the risk of substance abuse and a high chance of committing suicide in the event of a full
depression (Ramón-Arbués et al., 2020).
Depression among college students is a serious mental issue that affects in a big way how
the student thinks and behaves and can lead to significant emotional, functional and physical
issues. So it is crucial to understand the causes and effects of this issue among the students and
how it can be treated and even prevented.
Christian Aguiar
Same here, Jasmin. What does this evidence suggest about what might be lacking in colleges, or what college students need?
Christian Aguiar
Before continuing with more evidence, Jasmin, you should explain the significance of this evidence. Do college students need more help? More support?
Christian Aguiar
Can you find a study on how depression impacts schoolwork or activities?
Christian Aguiar
Can you find a scholarly study that explores WHY students might be reluctant to seek help? Are all students equally reluctant? Are there factors that influence them?
Christian Aguiar
I’ve underlined two sections that are both, in a sense, working thesis statements. I think this second one would work better, as it provides an argument you can develop step by step.
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Is this perhaps a continuation of the “some of the statistics” line above? If so, it needs to be in the same paragraph, Jasmin, otherwise your reader will get confused as I have here.
Christian Aguiar
Since there’s just one stat here, it would make more sense to present it directly.
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
This is a strong link between the background and the working thesis, which comes in the next paragraph.
Christian Aguiar
4
Some of the research approaches that can be employed to be able to identify depression in
college students include; getting help from the parents, this is by developing an approach of getting
to know from different parents on the well-being of the child, to be able to assess some of the most
common symptoms that could show depression. This is an essential aspect as it will be easier also
to train the parent on how to handle and provide support if the child is undergoing depression,
through; preparing the child for the unexpected, the importance of staying close, encouraging
healthy habits and developing a plan that is focused on student mental health (Park & Zarate Jr,
2019).
Another research method is designing a purpose design questionnaire that includes records
of sociodemographic data, such as; age, sex, year of study and performance in studies. The
questionnaire will consist of questions that will help measure the rate of depression among the
students. A number of colleges will be picked and select representatives to participate and increase
statistical power. To increase the accuracy of the research, it is essential to ensure that there is a
proportional stratified sampling of the colleges so that all the different age groups are represented.
Also, in the sampling process, the number of representatives to be obtained from each college will
be determined by calculations and proportional to size probability.
References
LeMoult, J., & Gotlib, I. H. (2019). Depression: A cognitive perspective. Clinical Psychology
Review, 69, 51-66.
Christian Aguiar
These aren’t quite research approaches, Jasmin – research approaches would be your lenses, like psychological or educational impacts. These are solutions you could propose.
5
Moeller, R. W., & Seehuus, M. (2019). Loneliness as a mediator for college students’ social skills
and experiences of depression and anxiety. Journal of adolescence, 73, 1-13.
Park, L. T., & Zarate Jr, C. A. (2019). Depression in the primary care setting. New England
Journal of Medicine, 380(6), 559-568.
Ramón-Arbués, E., Gea-Caballero, V., Granada-López, J. M., Juárez-Vela, R., Pellicer-García, B.,
& Antón-Solanas, I. (2020). The prevalence of depression, anxiety and stress and their
associated factors in college students. International Journal of Environmental Research and
Public Health, 17(19), 7001.
Taquet, M., Quoidbach, J., Gross, J. J., Saunders, K. E., & Goodwin, G. M. (2020). Mood
homeostasis, low mood, and history of depression in 2 large population samples. JAMA
Psychiatry, 77(9), 944-951.
Annotated Bibliography
By
Student
IGED210C Discovery Expository Writing
Date Submitted
Working Thesis Statement
Include your working thesis statement here. While not technically part of an annotated bibliography, keeping your thesis in mind while researching will make this process much more helpful.
Annotated Bibliography
Main Strand/Idea One: State the first main idea from your thesis.
Source One: APA-Style Reference
Source One: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Two: APA-Style Reference
Source Two: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Three: APA-Style Reference
Source Three: 1-paragraph annotation
Main Strand/Idea Two: State the second main idea from your thesis.
Source Four: APA-Style Reference
Source Four: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Five: APA-Style Reference
Source Five: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Six: APA-Style Reference
Source Six: 1-paragraph annotation
Main Strand/Idea Three: State the third main idea from your thesis.
Source Seven: APA-Style Reference
Source Seven: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Eight: APA-Style Reference
Source Eight: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Nine: APA-Style Reference
Source Nine: 1-paragraph annotation
Additional Main Strand/Ideas: Continue on if you have more strands. Keep in mind that you will only have time for 3-4 chunks or segments in your vidro
Source Ten: APA-style Reference
Source Ten: 1-paragraph annotation
Running head: MEMO 1
MEMO
Jasmin Linthicum
Professor Aguiar
Discovery Writing
02/23/2022
Title: College student depression
College student depression has been an issue that most of our students are fighting against
within themselves. Anxiety is among the top concerns amongst our college students and it is an
issue that needs urgent actions to be taken. I decided to talk about this problem because the school
realized that most students are recording absenteeism and low grades. It is important to address this
issue because Following research done, 40% of our students are in depression.the st
Anxiety, relationship troubles, lack of sleep, poor diets and eating habits, and a lack of
regular workouts are some of the major causes of student sadness, according to study conducted by
the management. These aren’t the sole causes of depression, therefore it’s critical to involve our
children in discussions that allow them to open up about their issues.
Having a high number of students suffering from depression is very disappointing. The
future of our nation depends on our students and being in our college it is our responsibility to help
them out. Most of the students have been having difficulty in concentration, their performances
have dropped, some will always look exhausted, and some have joined alcoholism. This is a result
of depression that the college students are going through. The impact of depression not only affects
Christian Aguiar
This paragraph repeats some of the earlier ideas; instead of repeating those ideas, this would be a good place to answer the third part of the prompt: What disciplinary lenses will you use?
Christian Aguiar
It can be a little confusing, but for a memo you would NOT indent the paragraphs – it’s business writing – but for your proposal you WILL.
Christian Aguiar
In your preliminary research for the proposal, these are the types of issues you will need to find research backing for.
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
I’m a little confused, Jasmin – who is the management? Are you imagining that this is a memo you’re writing at work?
Christian Aguiar
You make a good case in this first paragraph for the importance of your topic.
Christian Aguiar
Wow, this is a shocking number. Be sure to include the source here, Jasmin, just like we discussed in class.
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Good use of the memo format, Jasmin
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
That’s okay, but the research itself would need to be real, so this information must come from an actual study that you cite.
MEMO 2
the school performances but also the mental ability of our students. They are constantly in a
subconscious state with themselves.
This memo is to call upon every staff to help our students overcome depression and
anxiety. This can be possible if we create more time to interact and offer a listening hear to them.
Through this, they will feel comfortable and will be able to speak out about the problems they face.
Thank you.
Christian Aguiar
I like the creativity here, Jasmin. For the memo assignment, though, you need to talk about your own plans for this class. Are you perhaps going to help your audience understand how to support students struggling with depression?
1
CollegeStudent’s Depression
Jasmin Linthicum
Course Discovery Writing
Professor Aguiar
Date Due 02/24/202
2
College Student’s Depression
2
According to the World Health Organization (WHO), depression is a common and severe
health issue that affects how someone feels, thinks and acts. The most common symptoms of
depression are; having bad moods and feeling very sad, losing interest in the activities that were
once fun, loss of appetite, which in turn will lead to massive weight loss or gain that is not related
to dieting and difficulty in concentrating, thinking or making decisions (LeMoult & Gotlib, 2019).
People become depressed due to various factors; some of the significant social factors that
bring about depression include; encountering traumatic events, separation from parents or
caregivers and being bullied. Personality some people are inclined towards experiencing
depression. For instance, people who tend to hold worries, have a low-self-esteem, are
perfectionists and are very sensitive towards negative criticism naturally have a higher likelihood
of facing depression.
Depression throughout history has always been a health problem for people. According to
articles written by philosophers and writers throughout humanity’s history, there is depression,
which is a health condition. The articles also include some of the continuous struggles that have
been made to find a solution on treating this condition. For instance, the ancient Greeks and
Romans had different thinking on depression. Some of the literature shows that the Greeks had a
notion that depression was a form of evil spirit possession and used exorcism techniques like;
beatings and starvation as “treatments” to cure a person. On the other hand, the Romans thought
depression was a combination of biological and psychological issues and employed gymnastics,
special diet, herbal medicine and music to treat the patients (Taquet et al., 2020).
In our present day, some of the startling statistics concerning depression are; depression
affects approximately one in fifteen adults, that is close to 6.8% annually, and a projection of an
estimated one in six persons will encounter depression at a given point in their life, that is around
Christian Aguiar
All of these statistics come from research, so you need to cite them using an in-text citation like we learned in class. Luckily, we’re reviewing them again today (3/17).
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
This is another place where you need to cite your source. Which literature tells us this?
Christian Aguiar
I like the historical context, Jasmin. This could be a great way to begin the script for your video, too.
Christian Aguiar
Since this is an argument based on research – it draws on what scientists know about depression – you need to make it clear what the source is.
Christian Aguiar
Do you mean “personally, some people are inclined…” or perhaps that “some people’s personalities are inclined”?
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Remember, the colon (:) introduces a list like this; the semicolon (;) connects two complete thoughts.
Christian Aguiar
Great context, Jasmin. For your reader to understand your topic, they will need to first understand what depression is. This is a strong opening move.
Christian Aguiar
3
16.7%. Studies show that females are more likely to experience depression compared to the men.
Clinicians have also found that depression is more likely to occur during the late teens to mid-20s.
This age group indicates that college students are the ones who are likely to suffer most from the
effect of depression.
Depression in college students has affected their social life adversely by lowering their
mood, feelings and self-esteem. It has also affected their school life by; making it challenging to
handle their schoolwork and losing interest in activities like sports. It has led to emotional
outbursts such as anger, faulty self-assessments, and lack of energy. Some of the statistics that
show the extent of this problem are; the overall rate of college students that have been reported to
have depression is about 45% (Moeller & Seehuus,
2019).
Suicide has become the third leading cause of death among college students; 76% of those
reported depression. Their first encounter was their mid-20, and nearly two-thirds of students who
developed substance abuse issues reported experiencing depression. These statistics indicate that
this is a significant health crisis among college students.
Another significant factor that makes this a significant issue is that close to 75% of the
students experiencing depression are reluctant to seek help and medication. This brings about an
additional risk of harmful outcomes like; dropping out of college, performing poorly academically,
the risk of substance abuse and a high chance of committing suicide in the event of a full
depression (Ramón-Arbués et al., 2020).
Depression among college students is a serious mental issue that affects in a big way how
the student thinks and behaves and can lead to significant emotional, functional and physical
issues. So it is crucial to understand the causes and effects of this issue among the students and
how it can be treated and even prevented.
Christian Aguiar
Same here, Jasmin. What does this evidence suggest about what might be lacking in colleges, or what college students need?
Christian Aguiar
Before continuing with more evidence, Jasmin, you should explain the significance of this evidence. Do college students need more help? More support?
Christian Aguiar
Can you find a study on how depression impacts schoolwork or activities?
Christian Aguiar
Can you find a scholarly study that explores WHY students might be reluctant to seek help? Are all students equally reluctant? Are there factors that influence them?
Christian Aguiar
I’ve underlined two sections that are both, in a sense, working thesis statements. I think this second one would work better, as it provides an argument you can develop step by step.
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Is this perhaps a continuation of the “some of the statistics” line above? If so, it needs to be in the same paragraph, Jasmin, otherwise your reader will get confused as I have here.
Christian Aguiar
Since there’s just one stat here, it would make more sense to present it directly.
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
This is a strong link between the background and the working thesis, which comes in the next paragraph.
Christian Aguiar
4
Some of the research approaches that can be employed to be able to identify depression in
college students include; getting help from the parents, this is by developing an approach of getting
to know from different parents on the well-being of the child, to be able to assess some of the most
common symptoms that could show depression. This is an essential aspect as it will be easier also
to train the parent on how to handle and provide support if the child is undergoing depression,
through; preparing the child for the unexpected, the importance of staying close, encouraging
healthy habits and developing a plan that is focused on student mental health (Park & Zarate Jr,
2019).
Another research method is designing a purpose design questionnaire that includes records
of sociodemographic data, such as; age, sex, year of study and performance in studies. The
questionnaire will consist of questions that will help measure the rate of depression among the
students. A number of colleges will be picked and select representatives to participate and increase
statistical power. To increase the accuracy of the research, it is essential to ensure that there is a
proportional stratified sampling of the colleges so that all the different age groups are represented.
Also, in the sampling process, the number of representatives to be obtained from each college will
be determined by calculations and proportional to size probability.
References
LeMoult, J., & Gotlib, I. H. (2019). Depression: A cognitive perspective. Clinical Psychology
Review, 69, 51-66.
Christian Aguiar
These aren’t quite research approaches, Jasmin – research approaches would be your lenses, like psychological or educational impacts. These are solutions you could propose.
5
Moeller, R. W., & Seehuus, M. (2019). Loneliness as a mediator for college students’ social skills
and experiences of depression and anxiety. Journal of adolescence, 73, 1-13.
Park, L. T., & Zarate Jr, C. A. (2019). Depression in the primary care setting. New England
Journal of Medicine, 380(6), 559-568.
Ramón-Arbués, E., Gea-Caballero, V., Granada-López, J. M., Juárez-Vela, R., Pellicer-García, B.,
& Antón-Solanas, I. (2020). The prevalence of depression, anxiety and stress and their
associated factors in college students. International Journal of Environmental Research and
Public Health, 17(19), 7001.
Taquet, M., Quoidbach, J., Gross, J. J., Saunders, K. E., & Goodwin, G. M. (2020). Mood
homeostasis, low mood, and history of depression in 2 large population samples. JAMA
Psychiatry, 77(9), 944-951.
Annotated Bibliography
By
Student
IGED210C Discovery Expository Writing
Date Submitted
Working Thesis Statement
Include your working thesis statement here. While not technically part of an annotated bibliography, keeping your thesis in mind while researching will make this process much more helpful.
Annotated Bibliography
Main Strand/Idea One: State the first main idea from your thesis.
Source One: APA-Style Reference
Source One: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Two: APA-Style Reference
Source Two: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Three: APA-Style Reference
Source Three: 1-paragraph annotation
Main Strand/Idea Two: State the second main idea from your thesis.
Source Four: APA-Style Reference
Source Four: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Five: APA-Style Reference
Source Five: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Six: APA-Style Reference
Source Six: 1-paragraph annotation
Main Strand/Idea Three: State the third main idea from your thesis.
Source Seven: APA-Style Reference
Source Seven: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Eight: APA-Style Reference
Source Eight: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Nine: APA-Style Reference
Source Nine: 1-paragraph annotation
Additional Main Strand/Ideas: Continue on if you have more strands. Keep in mind that you will only have time for 3-4 chunks or segments in your vidro
Source Ten: APA-style Reference
Source Ten: 1-paragraph annotation
Running head: MEMO 1
MEMO
Jasmin Linthicum
Professor Aguiar
Discovery Writing
02/23/2022
Title: College student depression
College student depression has been an issue that most of our students are fighting against
within themselves. Anxiety is among the top concerns amongst our college students and it is an
issue that needs urgent actions to be taken. I decided to talk about this problem because the school
realized that most students are recording absenteeism and low grades. It is important to address this
issue because Following research done, 40% of our students are in depression.the st
Anxiety, relationship troubles, lack of sleep, poor diets and eating habits, and a lack of
regular workouts are some of the major causes of student sadness, according to study conducted by
the management. These aren’t the sole causes of depression, therefore it’s critical to involve our
children in discussions that allow them to open up about their issues.
Having a high number of students suffering from depression is very disappointing. The
future of our nation depends on our students and being in our college it is our responsibility to help
them out. Most of the students have been having difficulty in concentration, their performances
have dropped, some will always look exhausted, and some have joined alcoholism. This is a result
of depression that the college students are going through. The impact of depression not only affects
Christian Aguiar
This paragraph repeats some of the earlier ideas; instead of repeating those ideas, this would be a good place to answer the third part of the prompt: What disciplinary lenses will you use?
Christian Aguiar
It can be a little confusing, but for a memo you would NOT indent the paragraphs – it’s business writing – but for your proposal you WILL.
Christian Aguiar
In your preliminary research for the proposal, these are the types of issues you will need to find research backing for.
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
I’m a little confused, Jasmin – who is the management? Are you imagining that this is a memo you’re writing at work?
Christian Aguiar
You make a good case in this first paragraph for the importance of your topic.
Christian Aguiar
Wow, this is a shocking number. Be sure to include the source here, Jasmin, just like we discussed in class.
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Good use of the memo format, Jasmin
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
That’s okay, but the research itself would need to be real, so this information must come from an actual study that you cite.
MEMO 2
the school performances but also the mental ability of our students. They are constantly in a
subconscious state with themselves.
This memo is to call upon every staff to help our students overcome depression and
anxiety. This can be possible if we create more time to interact and offer a listening hear to them.
Through this, they will feel comfortable and will be able to speak out about the problems they face.
Thank you.
Christian Aguiar
I like the creativity here, Jasmin. For the memo assignment, though, you need to talk about your own plans for this class. Are you perhaps going to help your audience understand how to support students struggling with depression?
1
CollegeStudent’s Depression
Jasmin Linthicum
Course Discovery Writing
Professor Aguiar
Date Due 02/24/202
2
College Student’s Depression
2
According to the World Health Organization (WHO), depression is a common and severe
health issue that affects how someone feels, thinks and acts. The most common symptoms of
depression are; having bad moods and feeling very sad, losing interest in the activities that were
once fun, loss of appetite, which in turn will lead to massive weight loss or gain that is not related
to dieting and difficulty in concentrating, thinking or making decisions (LeMoult & Gotlib, 2019).
People become depressed due to various factors; some of the significant social factors that
bring about depression include; encountering traumatic events, separation from parents or
caregivers and being bullied. Personality some people are inclined towards experiencing
depression. For instance, people who tend to hold worries, have a low-self-esteem, are
perfectionists and are very sensitive towards negative criticism naturally have a higher likelihood
of facing depression.
Depression throughout history has always been a health problem for people. According to
articles written by philosophers and writers throughout humanity’s history, there is depression,
which is a health condition. The articles also include some of the continuous struggles that have
been made to find a solution on treating this condition. For instance, the ancient Greeks and
Romans had different thinking on depression. Some of the literature shows that the Greeks had a
notion that depression was a form of evil spirit possession and used exorcism techniques like;
beatings and starvation as “treatments” to cure a person. On the other hand, the Romans thought
depression was a combination of biological and psychological issues and employed gymnastics,
special diet, herbal medicine and music to treat the patients (Taquet et al., 2020).
In our present day, some of the startling statistics concerning depression are; depression
affects approximately one in fifteen adults, that is close to 6.8% annually, and a projection of an
estimated one in six persons will encounter depression at a given point in their life, that is around
Christian Aguiar
All of these statistics come from research, so you need to cite them using an in-text citation like we learned in class. Luckily, we’re reviewing them again today (3/17).
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
This is another place where you need to cite your source. Which literature tells us this?
Christian Aguiar
I like the historical context, Jasmin. This could be a great way to begin the script for your video, too.
Christian Aguiar
Since this is an argument based on research – it draws on what scientists know about depression – you need to make it clear what the source is.
Christian Aguiar
Do you mean “personally, some people are inclined…” or perhaps that “some people’s personalities are inclined”?
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Remember, the colon (:) introduces a list like this; the semicolon (;) connects two complete thoughts.
Christian Aguiar
Great context, Jasmin. For your reader to understand your topic, they will need to first understand what depression is. This is a strong opening move.
Christian Aguiar
3
16.7%. Studies show that females are more likely to experience depression compared to the men.
Clinicians have also found that depression is more likely to occur during the late teens to mid-20s.
This age group indicates that college students are the ones who are likely to suffer most from the
effect of depression.
Depression in college students has affected their social life adversely by lowering their
mood, feelings and self-esteem. It has also affected their school life by; making it challenging to
handle their schoolwork and losing interest in activities like sports. It has led to emotional
outbursts such as anger, faulty self-assessments, and lack of energy. Some of the statistics that
show the extent of this problem are; the overall rate of college students that have been reported to
have depression is about 45% (Moeller & Seehuus,
2019).
Suicide has become the third leading cause of death among college students; 76% of those
reported depression. Their first encounter was their mid-20, and nearly two-thirds of students who
developed substance abuse issues reported experiencing depression. These statistics indicate that
this is a significant health crisis among college students.
Another significant factor that makes this a significant issue is that close to 75% of the
students experiencing depression are reluctant to seek help and medication. This brings about an
additional risk of harmful outcomes like; dropping out of college, performing poorly academically,
the risk of substance abuse and a high chance of committing suicide in the event of a full
depression (Ramón-Arbués et al., 2020).
Depression among college students is a serious mental issue that affects in a big way how
the student thinks and behaves and can lead to significant emotional, functional and physical
issues. So it is crucial to understand the causes and effects of this issue among the students and
how it can be treated and even prevented.
Christian Aguiar
Same here, Jasmin. What does this evidence suggest about what might be lacking in colleges, or what college students need?
Christian Aguiar
Before continuing with more evidence, Jasmin, you should explain the significance of this evidence. Do college students need more help? More support?
Christian Aguiar
Can you find a study on how depression impacts schoolwork or activities?
Christian Aguiar
Can you find a scholarly study that explores WHY students might be reluctant to seek help? Are all students equally reluctant? Are there factors that influence them?
Christian Aguiar
I’ve underlined two sections that are both, in a sense, working thesis statements. I think this second one would work better, as it provides an argument you can develop step by step.
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Is this perhaps a continuation of the “some of the statistics” line above? If so, it needs to be in the same paragraph, Jasmin, otherwise your reader will get confused as I have here.
Christian Aguiar
Since there’s just one stat here, it would make more sense to present it directly.
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
This is a strong link between the background and the working thesis, which comes in the next paragraph.
Christian Aguiar
4
Some of the research approaches that can be employed to be able to identify depression in
college students include; getting help from the parents, this is by developing an approach of getting
to know from different parents on the well-being of the child, to be able to assess some of the most
common symptoms that could show depression. This is an essential aspect as it will be easier also
to train the parent on how to handle and provide support if the child is undergoing depression,
through; preparing the child for the unexpected, the importance of staying close, encouraging
healthy habits and developing a plan that is focused on student mental health (Park & Zarate Jr,
2019).
Another research method is designing a purpose design questionnaire that includes records
of sociodemographic data, such as; age, sex, year of study and performance in studies. The
questionnaire will consist of questions that will help measure the rate of depression among the
students. A number of colleges will be picked and select representatives to participate and increase
statistical power. To increase the accuracy of the research, it is essential to ensure that there is a
proportional stratified sampling of the colleges so that all the different age groups are represented.
Also, in the sampling process, the number of representatives to be obtained from each college will
be determined by calculations and proportional to size probability.
References
LeMoult, J., & Gotlib, I. H. (2019). Depression: A cognitive perspective. Clinical Psychology
Review, 69, 51-66.
Christian Aguiar
These aren’t quite research approaches, Jasmin – research approaches would be your lenses, like psychological or educational impacts. These are solutions you could propose.
5
Moeller, R. W., & Seehuus, M. (2019). Loneliness as a mediator for college students’ social skills
and experiences of depression and anxiety. Journal of adolescence, 73, 1-13.
Park, L. T., & Zarate Jr, C. A. (2019). Depression in the primary care setting. New England
Journal of Medicine, 380(6), 559-568.
Ramón-Arbués, E., Gea-Caballero, V., Granada-López, J. M., Juárez-Vela, R., Pellicer-García, B.,
& Antón-Solanas, I. (2020). The prevalence of depression, anxiety and stress and their
associated factors in college students. International Journal of Environmental Research and
Public Health, 17(19), 7001.
Taquet, M., Quoidbach, J., Gross, J. J., Saunders, K. E., & Goodwin, G. M. (2020). Mood
homeostasis, low mood, and history of depression in 2 large population samples. JAMA
Psychiatry, 77(9), 944-951.
Annotated Bibliography
By
Student
IGED210C Discovery Expository Writing
Date Submitted
Working Thesis Statement
Include your working thesis statement here. While not technically part of an annotated bibliography, keeping your thesis in mind while researching will make this process much more helpful.
Annotated Bibliography
Main Strand/Idea One: State the first main idea from your thesis.
Source One: APA-Style Reference
Source One: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Two: APA-Style Reference
Source Two: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Three: APA-Style Reference
Source Three: 1-paragraph annotation
Main Strand/Idea Two: State the second main idea from your thesis.
Source Four: APA-Style Reference
Source Four: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Five: APA-Style Reference
Source Five: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Six: APA-Style Reference
Source Six: 1-paragraph annotation
Main Strand/Idea Three: State the third main idea from your thesis.
Source Seven: APA-Style Reference
Source Seven: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Eight: APA-Style Reference
Source Eight: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Nine: APA-Style Reference
Source Nine: 1-paragraph annotation
Additional Main Strand/Ideas: Continue on if you have more strands. Keep in mind that you will only have time for 3-4 chunks or segments in your vidro
Source Ten: APA-style Reference
Source Ten: 1-paragraph annotation
Running head: MEMO 1
MEMO
Jasmin Linthicum
Professor Aguiar
Discovery Writing
02/23/2022
Title: College student depression
College student depression has been an issue that most of our students are fighting against
within themselves. Anxiety is among the top concerns amongst our college students and it is an
issue that needs urgent actions to be taken. I decided to talk about this problem because the school
realized that most students are recording absenteeism and low grades. It is important to address this
issue because Following research done, 40% of our students are in depression.the st
Anxiety, relationship troubles, lack of sleep, poor diets and eating habits, and a lack of
regular workouts are some of the major causes of student sadness, according to study conducted by
the management. These aren’t the sole causes of depression, therefore it’s critical to involve our
children in discussions that allow them to open up about their issues.
Having a high number of students suffering from depression is very disappointing. The
future of our nation depends on our students and being in our college it is our responsibility to help
them out. Most of the students have been having difficulty in concentration, their performances
have dropped, some will always look exhausted, and some have joined alcoholism. This is a result
of depression that the college students are going through. The impact of depression not only affects
Christian Aguiar
This paragraph repeats some of the earlier ideas; instead of repeating those ideas, this would be a good place to answer the third part of the prompt: What disciplinary lenses will you use?
Christian Aguiar
It can be a little confusing, but for a memo you would NOT indent the paragraphs – it’s business writing – but for your proposal you WILL.
Christian Aguiar
In your preliminary research for the proposal, these are the types of issues you will need to find research backing for.
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
I’m a little confused, Jasmin – who is the management? Are you imagining that this is a memo you’re writing at work?
Christian Aguiar
You make a good case in this first paragraph for the importance of your topic.
Christian Aguiar
Wow, this is a shocking number. Be sure to include the source here, Jasmin, just like we discussed in class.
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Good use of the memo format, Jasmin
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
That’s okay, but the research itself would need to be real, so this information must come from an actual study that you cite.
MEMO 2
the school performances but also the mental ability of our students. They are constantly in a
subconscious state with themselves.
This memo is to call upon every staff to help our students overcome depression and
anxiety. This can be possible if we create more time to interact and offer a listening hear to them.
Through this, they will feel comfortable and will be able to speak out about the problems they face.
Thank you.
Christian Aguiar
I like the creativity here, Jasmin. For the memo assignment, though, you need to talk about your own plans for this class. Are you perhaps going to help your audience understand how to support students struggling with depression?
1
CollegeStudent’s Depression
Jasmin Linthicum
Course Discovery Writing
Professor Aguiar
Date Due 02/24/202
2
College Student’s Depression
2
According to the World Health Organization (WHO), depression is a common and severe
health issue that affects how someone feels, thinks and acts. The most common symptoms of
depression are; having bad moods and feeling very sad, losing interest in the activities that were
once fun, loss of appetite, which in turn will lead to massive weight loss or gain that is not related
to dieting and difficulty in concentrating, thinking or making decisions (LeMoult & Gotlib, 2019).
People become depressed due to various factors; some of the significant social factors that
bring about depression include; encountering traumatic events, separation from parents or
caregivers and being bullied. Personality some people are inclined towards experiencing
depression. For instance, people who tend to hold worries, have a low-self-esteem, are
perfectionists and are very sensitive towards negative criticism naturally have a higher likelihood
of facing depression.
Depression throughout history has always been a health problem for people. According to
articles written by philosophers and writers throughout humanity’s history, there is depression,
which is a health condition. The articles also include some of the continuous struggles that have
been made to find a solution on treating this condition. For instance, the ancient Greeks and
Romans had different thinking on depression. Some of the literature shows that the Greeks had a
notion that depression was a form of evil spirit possession and used exorcism techniques like;
beatings and starvation as “treatments” to cure a person. On the other hand, the Romans thought
depression was a combination of biological and psychological issues and employed gymnastics,
special diet, herbal medicine and music to treat the patients (Taquet et al., 2020).
In our present day, some of the startling statistics concerning depression are; depression
affects approximately one in fifteen adults, that is close to 6.8% annually, and a projection of an
estimated one in six persons will encounter depression at a given point in their life, that is around
Christian Aguiar
All of these statistics come from research, so you need to cite them using an in-text citation like we learned in class. Luckily, we’re reviewing them again today (3/17).
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
This is another place where you need to cite your source. Which literature tells us this?
Christian Aguiar
I like the historical context, Jasmin. This could be a great way to begin the script for your video, too.
Christian Aguiar
Since this is an argument based on research – it draws on what scientists know about depression – you need to make it clear what the source is.
Christian Aguiar
Do you mean “personally, some people are inclined…” or perhaps that “some people’s personalities are inclined”?
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Remember, the colon (:) introduces a list like this; the semicolon (;) connects two complete thoughts.
Christian Aguiar
Great context, Jasmin. For your reader to understand your topic, they will need to first understand what depression is. This is a strong opening move.
Christian Aguiar
3
16.7%. Studies show that females are more likely to experience depression compared to the men.
Clinicians have also found that depression is more likely to occur during the late teens to mid-20s.
This age group indicates that college students are the ones who are likely to suffer most from the
effect of depression.
Depression in college students has affected their social life adversely by lowering their
mood, feelings and self-esteem. It has also affected their school life by; making it challenging to
handle their schoolwork and losing interest in activities like sports. It has led to emotional
outbursts such as anger, faulty self-assessments, and lack of energy. Some of the statistics that
show the extent of this problem are; the overall rate of college students that have been reported to
have depression is about 45% (Moeller & Seehuus,
2019).
Suicide has become the third leading cause of death among college students; 76% of those
reported depression. Their first encounter was their mid-20, and nearly two-thirds of students who
developed substance abuse issues reported experiencing depression. These statistics indicate that
this is a significant health crisis among college students.
Another significant factor that makes this a significant issue is that close to 75% of the
students experiencing depression are reluctant to seek help and medication. This brings about an
additional risk of harmful outcomes like; dropping out of college, performing poorly academically,
the risk of substance abuse and a high chance of committing suicide in the event of a full
depression (Ramón-Arbués et al., 2020).
Depression among college students is a serious mental issue that affects in a big way how
the student thinks and behaves and can lead to significant emotional, functional and physical
issues. So it is crucial to understand the causes and effects of this issue among the students and
how it can be treated and even prevented.
Christian Aguiar
Same here, Jasmin. What does this evidence suggest about what might be lacking in colleges, or what college students need?
Christian Aguiar
Before continuing with more evidence, Jasmin, you should explain the significance of this evidence. Do college students need more help? More support?
Christian Aguiar
Can you find a study on how depression impacts schoolwork or activities?
Christian Aguiar
Can you find a scholarly study that explores WHY students might be reluctant to seek help? Are all students equally reluctant? Are there factors that influence them?
Christian Aguiar
I’ve underlined two sections that are both, in a sense, working thesis statements. I think this second one would work better, as it provides an argument you can develop step by step.
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Is this perhaps a continuation of the “some of the statistics” line above? If so, it needs to be in the same paragraph, Jasmin, otherwise your reader will get confused as I have here.
Christian Aguiar
Since there’s just one stat here, it would make more sense to present it directly.
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
This is a strong link between the background and the working thesis, which comes in the next paragraph.
Christian Aguiar
4
Some of the research approaches that can be employed to be able to identify depression in
college students include; getting help from the parents, this is by developing an approach of getting
to know from different parents on the well-being of the child, to be able to assess some of the most
common symptoms that could show depression. This is an essential aspect as it will be easier also
to train the parent on how to handle and provide support if the child is undergoing depression,
through; preparing the child for the unexpected, the importance of staying close, encouraging
healthy habits and developing a plan that is focused on student mental health (Park & Zarate Jr,
2019).
Another research method is designing a purpose design questionnaire that includes records
of sociodemographic data, such as; age, sex, year of study and performance in studies. The
questionnaire will consist of questions that will help measure the rate of depression among the
students. A number of colleges will be picked and select representatives to participate and increase
statistical power. To increase the accuracy of the research, it is essential to ensure that there is a
proportional stratified sampling of the colleges so that all the different age groups are represented.
Also, in the sampling process, the number of representatives to be obtained from each college will
be determined by calculations and proportional to size probability.
References
LeMoult, J., & Gotlib, I. H. (2019). Depression: A cognitive perspective. Clinical Psychology
Review, 69, 51-66.
Christian Aguiar
These aren’t quite research approaches, Jasmin – research approaches would be your lenses, like psychological or educational impacts. These are solutions you could propose.
5
Moeller, R. W., & Seehuus, M. (2019). Loneliness as a mediator for college students’ social skills
and experiences of depression and anxiety. Journal of adolescence, 73, 1-13.
Park, L. T., & Zarate Jr, C. A. (2019). Depression in the primary care setting. New England
Journal of Medicine, 380(6), 559-568.
Ramón-Arbués, E., Gea-Caballero, V., Granada-López, J. M., Juárez-Vela, R., Pellicer-García, B.,
& Antón-Solanas, I. (2020). The prevalence of depression, anxiety and stress and their
associated factors in college students. International Journal of Environmental Research and
Public Health, 17(19), 7001.
Taquet, M., Quoidbach, J., Gross, J. J., Saunders, K. E., & Goodwin, G. M. (2020). Mood
homeostasis, low mood, and history of depression in 2 large population samples. JAMA
Psychiatry, 77(9), 944-951.
Annotated Bibliography
By
Student
IGED210C Discovery Expository Writing
Date Submitted
Working Thesis Statement
Include your working thesis statement here. While not technically part of an annotated bibliography, keeping your thesis in mind while researching will make this process much more helpful.
Annotated Bibliography
Main Strand/Idea One: State the first main idea from your thesis.
Source One: APA-Style Reference
Source One: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Two: APA-Style Reference
Source Two: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Three: APA-Style Reference
Source Three: 1-paragraph annotation
Main Strand/Idea Two: State the second main idea from your thesis.
Source Four: APA-Style Reference
Source Four: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Five: APA-Style Reference
Source Five: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Six: APA-Style Reference
Source Six: 1-paragraph annotation
Main Strand/Idea Three: State the third main idea from your thesis.
Source Seven: APA-Style Reference
Source Seven: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Eight: APA-Style Reference
Source Eight: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Nine: APA-Style Reference
Source Nine: 1-paragraph annotation
Additional Main Strand/Ideas: Continue on if you have more strands. Keep in mind that you will only have time for 3-4 chunks or segments in your vidro
Source Ten: APA-style Reference
Source Ten: 1-paragraph annotation
Running head: MEMO 1
MEMO
Jasmin Linthicum
Professor Aguiar
Discovery Writing
02/23/2022
Title: College student depression
College student depression has been an issue that most of our students are fighting against
within themselves. Anxiety is among the top concerns amongst our college students and it is an
issue that needs urgent actions to be taken. I decided to talk about this problem because the school
realized that most students are recording absenteeism and low grades. It is important to address this
issue because Following research done, 40% of our students are in depression.the st
Anxiety, relationship troubles, lack of sleep, poor diets and eating habits, and a lack of
regular workouts are some of the major causes of student sadness, according to study conducted by
the management. These aren’t the sole causes of depression, therefore it’s critical to involve our
children in discussions that allow them to open up about their issues.
Having a high number of students suffering from depression is very disappointing. The
future of our nation depends on our students and being in our college it is our responsibility to help
them out. Most of the students have been having difficulty in concentration, their performances
have dropped, some will always look exhausted, and some have joined alcoholism. This is a result
of depression that the college students are going through. The impact of depression not only affects
Christian Aguiar
This paragraph repeats some of the earlier ideas; instead of repeating those ideas, this would be a good place to answer the third part of the prompt: What disciplinary lenses will you use?
Christian Aguiar
It can be a little confusing, but for a memo you would NOT indent the paragraphs – it’s business writing – but for your proposal you WILL.
Christian Aguiar
In your preliminary research for the proposal, these are the types of issues you will need to find research backing for.
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
I’m a little confused, Jasmin – who is the management? Are you imagining that this is a memo you’re writing at work?
Christian Aguiar
You make a good case in this first paragraph for the importance of your topic.
Christian Aguiar
Wow, this is a shocking number. Be sure to include the source here, Jasmin, just like we discussed in class.
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Good use of the memo format, Jasmin
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
That’s okay, but the research itself would need to be real, so this information must come from an actual study that you cite.
MEMO 2
the school performances but also the mental ability of our students. They are constantly in a
subconscious state with themselves.
This memo is to call upon every staff to help our students overcome depression and
anxiety. This can be possible if we create more time to interact and offer a listening hear to them.
Through this, they will feel comfortable and will be able to speak out about the problems they face.
Thank you.
Christian Aguiar
I like the creativity here, Jasmin. For the memo assignment, though, you need to talk about your own plans for this class. Are you perhaps going to help your audience understand how to support students struggling with depression?
1
CollegeStudent’s Depression
Jasmin Linthicum
Course Discovery Writing
Professor Aguiar
Date Due 02/24/202
2
College Student’s Depression
2
According to the World Health Organization (WHO), depression is a common and severe
health issue that affects how someone feels, thinks and acts. The most common symptoms of
depression are; having bad moods and feeling very sad, losing interest in the activities that were
once fun, loss of appetite, which in turn will lead to massive weight loss or gain that is not related
to dieting and difficulty in concentrating, thinking or making decisions (LeMoult & Gotlib, 2019).
People become depressed due to various factors; some of the significant social factors that
bring about depression include; encountering traumatic events, separation from parents or
caregivers and being bullied. Personality some people are inclined towards experiencing
depression. For instance, people who tend to hold worries, have a low-self-esteem, are
perfectionists and are very sensitive towards negative criticism naturally have a higher likelihood
of facing depression.
Depression throughout history has always been a health problem for people. According to
articles written by philosophers and writers throughout humanity’s history, there is depression,
which is a health condition. The articles also include some of the continuous struggles that have
been made to find a solution on treating this condition. For instance, the ancient Greeks and
Romans had different thinking on depression. Some of the literature shows that the Greeks had a
notion that depression was a form of evil spirit possession and used exorcism techniques like;
beatings and starvation as “treatments” to cure a person. On the other hand, the Romans thought
depression was a combination of biological and psychological issues and employed gymnastics,
special diet, herbal medicine and music to treat the patients (Taquet et al., 2020).
In our present day, some of the startling statistics concerning depression are; depression
affects approximately one in fifteen adults, that is close to 6.8% annually, and a projection of an
estimated one in six persons will encounter depression at a given point in their life, that is around
Christian Aguiar
All of these statistics come from research, so you need to cite them using an in-text citation like we learned in class. Luckily, we’re reviewing them again today (3/17).
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
This is another place where you need to cite your source. Which literature tells us this?
Christian Aguiar
I like the historical context, Jasmin. This could be a great way to begin the script for your video, too.
Christian Aguiar
Since this is an argument based on research – it draws on what scientists know about depression – you need to make it clear what the source is.
Christian Aguiar
Do you mean “personally, some people are inclined…” or perhaps that “some people’s personalities are inclined”?
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Remember, the colon (:) introduces a list like this; the semicolon (;) connects two complete thoughts.
Christian Aguiar
Great context, Jasmin. For your reader to understand your topic, they will need to first understand what depression is. This is a strong opening move.
Christian Aguiar
3
16.7%. Studies show that females are more likely to experience depression compared to the men.
Clinicians have also found that depression is more likely to occur during the late teens to mid-20s.
This age group indicates that college students are the ones who are likely to suffer most from the
effect of depression.
Depression in college students has affected their social life adversely by lowering their
mood, feelings and self-esteem. It has also affected their school life by; making it challenging to
handle their schoolwork and losing interest in activities like sports. It has led to emotional
outbursts such as anger, faulty self-assessments, and lack of energy. Some of the statistics that
show the extent of this problem are; the overall rate of college students that have been reported to
have depression is about 45% (Moeller & Seehuus,
2019).
Suicide has become the third leading cause of death among college students; 76% of those
reported depression. Their first encounter was their mid-20, and nearly two-thirds of students who
developed substance abuse issues reported experiencing depression. These statistics indicate that
this is a significant health crisis among college students.
Another significant factor that makes this a significant issue is that close to 75% of the
students experiencing depression are reluctant to seek help and medication. This brings about an
additional risk of harmful outcomes like; dropping out of college, performing poorly academically,
the risk of substance abuse and a high chance of committing suicide in the event of a full
depression (Ramón-Arbués et al., 2020).
Depression among college students is a serious mental issue that affects in a big way how
the student thinks and behaves and can lead to significant emotional, functional and physical
issues. So it is crucial to understand the causes and effects of this issue among the students and
how it can be treated and even prevented.
Christian Aguiar
Same here, Jasmin. What does this evidence suggest about what might be lacking in colleges, or what college students need?
Christian Aguiar
Before continuing with more evidence, Jasmin, you should explain the significance of this evidence. Do college students need more help? More support?
Christian Aguiar
Can you find a study on how depression impacts schoolwork or activities?
Christian Aguiar
Can you find a scholarly study that explores WHY students might be reluctant to seek help? Are all students equally reluctant? Are there factors that influence them?
Christian Aguiar
I’ve underlined two sections that are both, in a sense, working thesis statements. I think this second one would work better, as it provides an argument you can develop step by step.
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Is this perhaps a continuation of the “some of the statistics” line above? If so, it needs to be in the same paragraph, Jasmin, otherwise your reader will get confused as I have here.
Christian Aguiar
Since there’s just one stat here, it would make more sense to present it directly.
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
This is a strong link between the background and the working thesis, which comes in the next paragraph.
Christian Aguiar
4
Some of the research approaches that can be employed to be able to identify depression in
college students include; getting help from the parents, this is by developing an approach of getting
to know from different parents on the well-being of the child, to be able to assess some of the most
common symptoms that could show depression. This is an essential aspect as it will be easier also
to train the parent on how to handle and provide support if the child is undergoing depression,
through; preparing the child for the unexpected, the importance of staying close, encouraging
healthy habits and developing a plan that is focused on student mental health (Park & Zarate Jr,
2019).
Another research method is designing a purpose design questionnaire that includes records
of sociodemographic data, such as; age, sex, year of study and performance in studies. The
questionnaire will consist of questions that will help measure the rate of depression among the
students. A number of colleges will be picked and select representatives to participate and increase
statistical power. To increase the accuracy of the research, it is essential to ensure that there is a
proportional stratified sampling of the colleges so that all the different age groups are represented.
Also, in the sampling process, the number of representatives to be obtained from each college will
be determined by calculations and proportional to size probability.
References
LeMoult, J., & Gotlib, I. H. (2019). Depression: A cognitive perspective. Clinical Psychology
Review, 69, 51-66.
Christian Aguiar
These aren’t quite research approaches, Jasmin – research approaches would be your lenses, like psychological or educational impacts. These are solutions you could propose.
5
Moeller, R. W., & Seehuus, M. (2019). Loneliness as a mediator for college students’ social skills
and experiences of depression and anxiety. Journal of adolescence, 73, 1-13.
Park, L. T., & Zarate Jr, C. A. (2019). Depression in the primary care setting. New England
Journal of Medicine, 380(6), 559-568.
Ramón-Arbués, E., Gea-Caballero, V., Granada-López, J. M., Juárez-Vela, R., Pellicer-García, B.,
& Antón-Solanas, I. (2020). The prevalence of depression, anxiety and stress and their
associated factors in college students. International Journal of Environmental Research and
Public Health, 17(19), 7001.
Taquet, M., Quoidbach, J., Gross, J. J., Saunders, K. E., & Goodwin, G. M. (2020). Mood
homeostasis, low mood, and history of depression in 2 large population samples. JAMA
Psychiatry, 77(9), 944-951.
Annotated Bibliography
By
Student
IGED210C Discovery Expository Writing
Date Submitted
Working Thesis Statement
Include your working thesis statement here. While not technically part of an annotated bibliography, keeping your thesis in mind while researching will make this process much more helpful.
Annotated Bibliography
Main Strand/Idea One: State the first main idea from your thesis.
Source One: APA-Style Reference
Source One: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Two: APA-Style Reference
Source Two: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Three: APA-Style Reference
Source Three: 1-paragraph annotation
Main Strand/Idea Two: State the second main idea from your thesis.
Source Four: APA-Style Reference
Source Four: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Five: APA-Style Reference
Source Five: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Six: APA-Style Reference
Source Six: 1-paragraph annotation
Main Strand/Idea Three: State the third main idea from your thesis.
Source Seven: APA-Style Reference
Source Seven: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Eight: APA-Style Reference
Source Eight: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Nine: APA-Style Reference
Source Nine: 1-paragraph annotation
Additional Main Strand/Ideas: Continue on if you have more strands. Keep in mind that you will only have time for 3-4 chunks or segments in your vidro
Source Ten: APA-style Reference
Source Ten: 1-paragraph annotation
Running head: MEMO 1
MEMO
Jasmin Linthicum
Professor Aguiar
Discovery Writing
02/23/2022
Title: College student depression
College student depression has been an issue that most of our students are fighting against
within themselves. Anxiety is among the top concerns amongst our college students and it is an
issue that needs urgent actions to be taken. I decided to talk about this problem because the school
realized that most students are recording absenteeism and low grades. It is important to address this
issue because Following research done, 40% of our students are in depression.the st
Anxiety, relationship troubles, lack of sleep, poor diets and eating habits, and a lack of
regular workouts are some of the major causes of student sadness, according to study conducted by
the management. These aren’t the sole causes of depression, therefore it’s critical to involve our
children in discussions that allow them to open up about their issues.
Having a high number of students suffering from depression is very disappointing. The
future of our nation depends on our students and being in our college it is our responsibility to help
them out. Most of the students have been having difficulty in concentration, their performances
have dropped, some will always look exhausted, and some have joined alcoholism. This is a result
of depression that the college students are going through. The impact of depression not only affects
Christian Aguiar
This paragraph repeats some of the earlier ideas; instead of repeating those ideas, this would be a good place to answer the third part of the prompt: What disciplinary lenses will you use?
Christian Aguiar
It can be a little confusing, but for a memo you would NOT indent the paragraphs – it’s business writing – but for your proposal you WILL.
Christian Aguiar
In your preliminary research for the proposal, these are the types of issues you will need to find research backing for.
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
I’m a little confused, Jasmin – who is the management? Are you imagining that this is a memo you’re writing at work?
Christian Aguiar
You make a good case in this first paragraph for the importance of your topic.
Christian Aguiar
Wow, this is a shocking number. Be sure to include the source here, Jasmin, just like we discussed in class.
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Good use of the memo format, Jasmin
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
That’s okay, but the research itself would need to be real, so this information must come from an actual study that you cite.
MEMO 2
the school performances but also the mental ability of our students. They are constantly in a
subconscious state with themselves.
This memo is to call upon every staff to help our students overcome depression and
anxiety. This can be possible if we create more time to interact and offer a listening hear to them.
Through this, they will feel comfortable and will be able to speak out about the problems they face.
Thank you.
Christian Aguiar
I like the creativity here, Jasmin. For the memo assignment, though, you need to talk about your own plans for this class. Are you perhaps going to help your audience understand how to support students struggling with depression?
1
CollegeStudent’s Depression
Jasmin Linthicum
Course Discovery Writing
Professor Aguiar
Date Due 02/24/202
2
College Student’s Depression
2
According to the World Health Organization (WHO), depression is a common and severe
health issue that affects how someone feels, thinks and acts. The most common symptoms of
depression are; having bad moods and feeling very sad, losing interest in the activities that were
once fun, loss of appetite, which in turn will lead to massive weight loss or gain that is not related
to dieting and difficulty in concentrating, thinking or making decisions (LeMoult & Gotlib, 2019).
People become depressed due to various factors; some of the significant social factors that
bring about depression include; encountering traumatic events, separation from parents or
caregivers and being bullied. Personality some people are inclined towards experiencing
depression. For instance, people who tend to hold worries, have a low-self-esteem, are
perfectionists and are very sensitive towards negative criticism naturally have a higher likelihood
of facing depression.
Depression throughout history has always been a health problem for people. According to
articles written by philosophers and writers throughout humanity’s history, there is depression,
which is a health condition. The articles also include some of the continuous struggles that have
been made to find a solution on treating this condition. For instance, the ancient Greeks and
Romans had different thinking on depression. Some of the literature shows that the Greeks had a
notion that depression was a form of evil spirit possession and used exorcism techniques like;
beatings and starvation as “treatments” to cure a person. On the other hand, the Romans thought
depression was a combination of biological and psychological issues and employed gymnastics,
special diet, herbal medicine and music to treat the patients (Taquet et al., 2020).
In our present day, some of the startling statistics concerning depression are; depression
affects approximately one in fifteen adults, that is close to 6.8% annually, and a projection of an
estimated one in six persons will encounter depression at a given point in their life, that is around
Christian Aguiar
All of these statistics come from research, so you need to cite them using an in-text citation like we learned in class. Luckily, we’re reviewing them again today (3/17).
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
This is another place where you need to cite your source. Which literature tells us this?
Christian Aguiar
I like the historical context, Jasmin. This could be a great way to begin the script for your video, too.
Christian Aguiar
Since this is an argument based on research – it draws on what scientists know about depression – you need to make it clear what the source is.
Christian Aguiar
Do you mean “personally, some people are inclined…” or perhaps that “some people’s personalities are inclined”?
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Remember, the colon (:) introduces a list like this; the semicolon (;) connects two complete thoughts.
Christian Aguiar
Great context, Jasmin. For your reader to understand your topic, they will need to first understand what depression is. This is a strong opening move.
Christian Aguiar
3
16.7%. Studies show that females are more likely to experience depression compared to the men.
Clinicians have also found that depression is more likely to occur during the late teens to mid-20s.
This age group indicates that college students are the ones who are likely to suffer most from the
effect of depression.
Depression in college students has affected their social life adversely by lowering their
mood, feelings and self-esteem. It has also affected their school life by; making it challenging to
handle their schoolwork and losing interest in activities like sports. It has led to emotional
outbursts such as anger, faulty self-assessments, and lack of energy. Some of the statistics that
show the extent of this problem are; the overall rate of college students that have been reported to
have depression is about 45% (Moeller & Seehuus,
2019).
Suicide has become the third leading cause of death among college students; 76% of those
reported depression. Their first encounter was their mid-20, and nearly two-thirds of students who
developed substance abuse issues reported experiencing depression. These statistics indicate that
this is a significant health crisis among college students.
Another significant factor that makes this a significant issue is that close to 75% of the
students experiencing depression are reluctant to seek help and medication. This brings about an
additional risk of harmful outcomes like; dropping out of college, performing poorly academically,
the risk of substance abuse and a high chance of committing suicide in the event of a full
depression (Ramón-Arbués et al., 2020).
Depression among college students is a serious mental issue that affects in a big way how
the student thinks and behaves and can lead to significant emotional, functional and physical
issues. So it is crucial to understand the causes and effects of this issue among the students and
how it can be treated and even prevented.
Christian Aguiar
Same here, Jasmin. What does this evidence suggest about what might be lacking in colleges, or what college students need?
Christian Aguiar
Before continuing with more evidence, Jasmin, you should explain the significance of this evidence. Do college students need more help? More support?
Christian Aguiar
Can you find a study on how depression impacts schoolwork or activities?
Christian Aguiar
Can you find a scholarly study that explores WHY students might be reluctant to seek help? Are all students equally reluctant? Are there factors that influence them?
Christian Aguiar
I’ve underlined two sections that are both, in a sense, working thesis statements. I think this second one would work better, as it provides an argument you can develop step by step.
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Is this perhaps a continuation of the “some of the statistics” line above? If so, it needs to be in the same paragraph, Jasmin, otherwise your reader will get confused as I have here.
Christian Aguiar
Since there’s just one stat here, it would make more sense to present it directly.
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
This is a strong link between the background and the working thesis, which comes in the next paragraph.
Christian Aguiar
4
Some of the research approaches that can be employed to be able to identify depression in
college students include; getting help from the parents, this is by developing an approach of getting
to know from different parents on the well-being of the child, to be able to assess some of the most
common symptoms that could show depression. This is an essential aspect as it will be easier also
to train the parent on how to handle and provide support if the child is undergoing depression,
through; preparing the child for the unexpected, the importance of staying close, encouraging
healthy habits and developing a plan that is focused on student mental health (Park & Zarate Jr,
2019).
Another research method is designing a purpose design questionnaire that includes records
of sociodemographic data, such as; age, sex, year of study and performance in studies. The
questionnaire will consist of questions that will help measure the rate of depression among the
students. A number of colleges will be picked and select representatives to participate and increase
statistical power. To increase the accuracy of the research, it is essential to ensure that there is a
proportional stratified sampling of the colleges so that all the different age groups are represented.
Also, in the sampling process, the number of representatives to be obtained from each college will
be determined by calculations and proportional to size probability.
References
LeMoult, J., & Gotlib, I. H. (2019). Depression: A cognitive perspective. Clinical Psychology
Review, 69, 51-66.
Christian Aguiar
These aren’t quite research approaches, Jasmin – research approaches would be your lenses, like psychological or educational impacts. These are solutions you could propose.
5
Moeller, R. W., & Seehuus, M. (2019). Loneliness as a mediator for college students’ social skills
and experiences of depression and anxiety. Journal of adolescence, 73, 1-13.
Park, L. T., & Zarate Jr, C. A. (2019). Depression in the primary care setting. New England
Journal of Medicine, 380(6), 559-568.
Ramón-Arbués, E., Gea-Caballero, V., Granada-López, J. M., Juárez-Vela, R., Pellicer-García, B.,
& Antón-Solanas, I. (2020). The prevalence of depression, anxiety and stress and their
associated factors in college students. International Journal of Environmental Research and
Public Health, 17(19), 7001.
Taquet, M., Quoidbach, J., Gross, J. J., Saunders, K. E., & Goodwin, G. M. (2020). Mood
homeostasis, low mood, and history of depression in 2 large population samples. JAMA
Psychiatry, 77(9), 944-951.
Annotated Bibliography
By
Student
IGED210C Discovery Expository Writing
Date Submitted
Working Thesis Statement
Include your working thesis statement here. While not technically part of an annotated bibliography, keeping your thesis in mind while researching will make this process much more helpful.
Annotated Bibliography
Main Strand/Idea One: State the first main idea from your thesis.
Source One: APA-Style Reference
Source One: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Two: APA-Style Reference
Source Two: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Three: APA-Style Reference
Source Three: 1-paragraph annotation
Main Strand/Idea Two: State the second main idea from your thesis.
Source Four: APA-Style Reference
Source Four: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Five: APA-Style Reference
Source Five: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Six: APA-Style Reference
Source Six: 1-paragraph annotation
Main Strand/Idea Three: State the third main idea from your thesis.
Source Seven: APA-Style Reference
Source Seven: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Eight: APA-Style Reference
Source Eight: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Nine: APA-Style Reference
Source Nine: 1-paragraph annotation
Additional Main Strand/Ideas: Continue on if you have more strands. Keep in mind that you will only have time for 3-4 chunks or segments in your vidro
Source Ten: APA-style Reference
Source Ten: 1-paragraph annotation
Running head: MEMO 1
MEMO
Jasmin Linthicum
Professor Aguiar
Discovery Writing
02/23/2022
Title: College student depression
College student depression has been an issue that most of our students are fighting against
within themselves. Anxiety is among the top concerns amongst our college students and it is an
issue that needs urgent actions to be taken. I decided to talk about this problem because the school
realized that most students are recording absenteeism and low grades. It is important to address this
issue because Following research done, 40% of our students are in depression.the st
Anxiety, relationship troubles, lack of sleep, poor diets and eating habits, and a lack of
regular workouts are some of the major causes of student sadness, according to study conducted by
the management. These aren’t the sole causes of depression, therefore it’s critical to involve our
children in discussions that allow them to open up about their issues.
Having a high number of students suffering from depression is very disappointing. The
future of our nation depends on our students and being in our college it is our responsibility to help
them out. Most of the students have been having difficulty in concentration, their performances
have dropped, some will always look exhausted, and some have joined alcoholism. This is a result
of depression that the college students are going through. The impact of depression not only affects
Christian Aguiar
This paragraph repeats some of the earlier ideas; instead of repeating those ideas, this would be a good place to answer the third part of the prompt: What disciplinary lenses will you use?
Christian Aguiar
It can be a little confusing, but for a memo you would NOT indent the paragraphs – it’s business writing – but for your proposal you WILL.
Christian Aguiar
In your preliminary research for the proposal, these are the types of issues you will need to find research backing for.
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
I’m a little confused, Jasmin – who is the management? Are you imagining that this is a memo you’re writing at work?
Christian Aguiar
You make a good case in this first paragraph for the importance of your topic.
Christian Aguiar
Wow, this is a shocking number. Be sure to include the source here, Jasmin, just like we discussed in class.
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Good use of the memo format, Jasmin
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
That’s okay, but the research itself would need to be real, so this information must come from an actual study that you cite.
MEMO 2
the school performances but also the mental ability of our students. They are constantly in a
subconscious state with themselves.
This memo is to call upon every staff to help our students overcome depression and
anxiety. This can be possible if we create more time to interact and offer a listening hear to them.
Through this, they will feel comfortable and will be able to speak out about the problems they face.
Thank you.
Christian Aguiar
I like the creativity here, Jasmin. For the memo assignment, though, you need to talk about your own plans for this class. Are you perhaps going to help your audience understand how to support students struggling with depression?
1
CollegeStudent’s Depression
Jasmin Linthicum
Course Discovery Writing
Professor Aguiar
Date Due 02/24/202
2
College Student’s Depression
2
According to the World Health Organization (WHO), depression is a common and severe
health issue that affects how someone feels, thinks and acts. The most common symptoms of
depression are; having bad moods and feeling very sad, losing interest in the activities that were
once fun, loss of appetite, which in turn will lead to massive weight loss or gain that is not related
to dieting and difficulty in concentrating, thinking or making decisions (LeMoult & Gotlib, 2019).
People become depressed due to various factors; some of the significant social factors that
bring about depression include; encountering traumatic events, separation from parents or
caregivers and being bullied. Personality some people are inclined towards experiencing
depression. For instance, people who tend to hold worries, have a low-self-esteem, are
perfectionists and are very sensitive towards negative criticism naturally have a higher likelihood
of facing depression.
Depression throughout history has always been a health problem for people. According to
articles written by philosophers and writers throughout humanity’s history, there is depression,
which is a health condition. The articles also include some of the continuous struggles that have
been made to find a solution on treating this condition. For instance, the ancient Greeks and
Romans had different thinking on depression. Some of the literature shows that the Greeks had a
notion that depression was a form of evil spirit possession and used exorcism techniques like;
beatings and starvation as “treatments” to cure a person. On the other hand, the Romans thought
depression was a combination of biological and psychological issues and employed gymnastics,
special diet, herbal medicine and music to treat the patients (Taquet et al., 2020).
In our present day, some of the startling statistics concerning depression are; depression
affects approximately one in fifteen adults, that is close to 6.8% annually, and a projection of an
estimated one in six persons will encounter depression at a given point in their life, that is around
Christian Aguiar
All of these statistics come from research, so you need to cite them using an in-text citation like we learned in class. Luckily, we’re reviewing them again today (3/17).
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
This is another place where you need to cite your source. Which literature tells us this?
Christian Aguiar
I like the historical context, Jasmin. This could be a great way to begin the script for your video, too.
Christian Aguiar
Since this is an argument based on research – it draws on what scientists know about depression – you need to make it clear what the source is.
Christian Aguiar
Do you mean “personally, some people are inclined…” or perhaps that “some people’s personalities are inclined”?
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Remember, the colon (:) introduces a list like this; the semicolon (;) connects two complete thoughts.
Christian Aguiar
Great context, Jasmin. For your reader to understand your topic, they will need to first understand what depression is. This is a strong opening move.
Christian Aguiar
3
16.7%. Studies show that females are more likely to experience depression compared to the men.
Clinicians have also found that depression is more likely to occur during the late teens to mid-20s.
This age group indicates that college students are the ones who are likely to suffer most from the
effect of depression.
Depression in college students has affected their social life adversely by lowering their
mood, feelings and self-esteem. It has also affected their school life by; making it challenging to
handle their schoolwork and losing interest in activities like sports. It has led to emotional
outbursts such as anger, faulty self-assessments, and lack of energy. Some of the statistics that
show the extent of this problem are; the overall rate of college students that have been reported to
have depression is about 45% (Moeller & Seehuus,
2019).
Suicide has become the third leading cause of death among college students; 76% of those
reported depression. Their first encounter was their mid-20, and nearly two-thirds of students who
developed substance abuse issues reported experiencing depression. These statistics indicate that
this is a significant health crisis among college students.
Another significant factor that makes this a significant issue is that close to 75% of the
students experiencing depression are reluctant to seek help and medication. This brings about an
additional risk of harmful outcomes like; dropping out of college, performing poorly academically,
the risk of substance abuse and a high chance of committing suicide in the event of a full
depression (Ramón-Arbués et al., 2020).
Depression among college students is a serious mental issue that affects in a big way how
the student thinks and behaves and can lead to significant emotional, functional and physical
issues. So it is crucial to understand the causes and effects of this issue among the students and
how it can be treated and even prevented.
Christian Aguiar
Same here, Jasmin. What does this evidence suggest about what might be lacking in colleges, or what college students need?
Christian Aguiar
Before continuing with more evidence, Jasmin, you should explain the significance of this evidence. Do college students need more help? More support?
Christian Aguiar
Can you find a study on how depression impacts schoolwork or activities?
Christian Aguiar
Can you find a scholarly study that explores WHY students might be reluctant to seek help? Are all students equally reluctant? Are there factors that influence them?
Christian Aguiar
I’ve underlined two sections that are both, in a sense, working thesis statements. I think this second one would work better, as it provides an argument you can develop step by step.
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Is this perhaps a continuation of the “some of the statistics” line above? If so, it needs to be in the same paragraph, Jasmin, otherwise your reader will get confused as I have here.
Christian Aguiar
Since there’s just one stat here, it would make more sense to present it directly.
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
This is a strong link between the background and the working thesis, which comes in the next paragraph.
Christian Aguiar
4
Some of the research approaches that can be employed to be able to identify depression in
college students include; getting help from the parents, this is by developing an approach of getting
to know from different parents on the well-being of the child, to be able to assess some of the most
common symptoms that could show depression. This is an essential aspect as it will be easier also
to train the parent on how to handle and provide support if the child is undergoing depression,
through; preparing the child for the unexpected, the importance of staying close, encouraging
healthy habits and developing a plan that is focused on student mental health (Park & Zarate Jr,
2019).
Another research method is designing a purpose design questionnaire that includes records
of sociodemographic data, such as; age, sex, year of study and performance in studies. The
questionnaire will consist of questions that will help measure the rate of depression among the
students. A number of colleges will be picked and select representatives to participate and increase
statistical power. To increase the accuracy of the research, it is essential to ensure that there is a
proportional stratified sampling of the colleges so that all the different age groups are represented.
Also, in the sampling process, the number of representatives to be obtained from each college will
be determined by calculations and proportional to size probability.
References
LeMoult, J., & Gotlib, I. H. (2019). Depression: A cognitive perspective. Clinical Psychology
Review, 69, 51-66.
Christian Aguiar
These aren’t quite research approaches, Jasmin – research approaches would be your lenses, like psychological or educational impacts. These are solutions you could propose.
5
Moeller, R. W., & Seehuus, M. (2019). Loneliness as a mediator for college students’ social skills
and experiences of depression and anxiety. Journal of adolescence, 73, 1-13.
Park, L. T., & Zarate Jr, C. A. (2019). Depression in the primary care setting. New England
Journal of Medicine, 380(6), 559-568.
Ramón-Arbués, E., Gea-Caballero, V., Granada-López, J. M., Juárez-Vela, R., Pellicer-García, B.,
& Antón-Solanas, I. (2020). The prevalence of depression, anxiety and stress and their
associated factors in college students. International Journal of Environmental Research and
Public Health, 17(19), 7001.
Taquet, M., Quoidbach, J., Gross, J. J., Saunders, K. E., & Goodwin, G. M. (2020). Mood
homeostasis, low mood, and history of depression in 2 large population samples. JAMA
Psychiatry, 77(9), 944-951.
Annotated Bibliography
By
Student
IGED210C Discovery Expository Writing
Date Submitted
Working Thesis Statement
Include your working thesis statement here. While not technically part of an annotated bibliography, keeping your thesis in mind while researching will make this process much more helpful.
Annotated Bibliography
Main Strand/Idea One: State the first main idea from your thesis.
Source One: APA-Style Reference
Source One: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Two: APA-Style Reference
Source Two: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Three: APA-Style Reference
Source Three: 1-paragraph annotation
Main Strand/Idea Two: State the second main idea from your thesis.
Source Four: APA-Style Reference
Source Four: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Five: APA-Style Reference
Source Five: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Six: APA-Style Reference
Source Six: 1-paragraph annotation
Main Strand/Idea Three: State the third main idea from your thesis.
Source Seven: APA-Style Reference
Source Seven: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Eight: APA-Style Reference
Source Eight: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Nine: APA-Style Reference
Source Nine: 1-paragraph annotation
Additional Main Strand/Ideas: Continue on if you have more strands. Keep in mind that you will only have time for 3-4 chunks or segments in your vidro
Source Ten: APA-style Reference
Source Ten: 1-paragraph annotation
Running head: MEMO 1
MEMO
Jasmin Linthicum
Professor Aguiar
Discovery Writing
02/23/2022
Title: College student depression
College student depression has been an issue that most of our students are fighting against
within themselves. Anxiety is among the top concerns amongst our college students and it is an
issue that needs urgent actions to be taken. I decided to talk about this problem because the school
realized that most students are recording absenteeism and low grades. It is important to address this
issue because Following research done, 40% of our students are in depression.the st
Anxiety, relationship troubles, lack of sleep, poor diets and eating habits, and a lack of
regular workouts are some of the major causes of student sadness, according to study conducted by
the management. These aren’t the sole causes of depression, therefore it’s critical to involve our
children in discussions that allow them to open up about their issues.
Having a high number of students suffering from depression is very disappointing. The
future of our nation depends on our students and being in our college it is our responsibility to help
them out. Most of the students have been having difficulty in concentration, their performances
have dropped, some will always look exhausted, and some have joined alcoholism. This is a result
of depression that the college students are going through. The impact of depression not only affects
Christian Aguiar
This paragraph repeats some of the earlier ideas; instead of repeating those ideas, this would be a good place to answer the third part of the prompt: What disciplinary lenses will you use?
Christian Aguiar
It can be a little confusing, but for a memo you would NOT indent the paragraphs – it’s business writing – but for your proposal you WILL.
Christian Aguiar
In your preliminary research for the proposal, these are the types of issues you will need to find research backing for.
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
I’m a little confused, Jasmin – who is the management? Are you imagining that this is a memo you’re writing at work?
Christian Aguiar
You make a good case in this first paragraph for the importance of your topic.
Christian Aguiar
Wow, this is a shocking number. Be sure to include the source here, Jasmin, just like we discussed in class.
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Good use of the memo format, Jasmin
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
That’s okay, but the research itself would need to be real, so this information must come from an actual study that you cite.
MEMO 2
the school performances but also the mental ability of our students. They are constantly in a
subconscious state with themselves.
This memo is to call upon every staff to help our students overcome depression and
anxiety. This can be possible if we create more time to interact and offer a listening hear to them.
Through this, they will feel comfortable and will be able to speak out about the problems they face.
Thank you.
Christian Aguiar
I like the creativity here, Jasmin. For the memo assignment, though, you need to talk about your own plans for this class. Are you perhaps going to help your audience understand how to support students struggling with depression?
1
CollegeStudent’s Depression
Jasmin Linthicum
Course Discovery Writing
Professor Aguiar
Date Due 02/24/202
2
College Student’s Depression
2
According to the World Health Organization (WHO), depression is a common and severe
health issue that affects how someone feels, thinks and acts. The most common symptoms of
depression are; having bad moods and feeling very sad, losing interest in the activities that were
once fun, loss of appetite, which in turn will lead to massive weight loss or gain that is not related
to dieting and difficulty in concentrating, thinking or making decisions (LeMoult & Gotlib, 2019).
People become depressed due to various factors; some of the significant social factors that
bring about depression include; encountering traumatic events, separation from parents or
caregivers and being bullied. Personality some people are inclined towards experiencing
depression. For instance, people who tend to hold worries, have a low-self-esteem, are
perfectionists and are very sensitive towards negative criticism naturally have a higher likelihood
of facing depression.
Depression throughout history has always been a health problem for people. According to
articles written by philosophers and writers throughout humanity’s history, there is depression,
which is a health condition. The articles also include some of the continuous struggles that have
been made to find a solution on treating this condition. For instance, the ancient Greeks and
Romans had different thinking on depression. Some of the literature shows that the Greeks had a
notion that depression was a form of evil spirit possession and used exorcism techniques like;
beatings and starvation as “treatments” to cure a person. On the other hand, the Romans thought
depression was a combination of biological and psychological issues and employed gymnastics,
special diet, herbal medicine and music to treat the patients (Taquet et al., 2020).
In our present day, some of the startling statistics concerning depression are; depression
affects approximately one in fifteen adults, that is close to 6.8% annually, and a projection of an
estimated one in six persons will encounter depression at a given point in their life, that is around
Christian Aguiar
All of these statistics come from research, so you need to cite them using an in-text citation like we learned in class. Luckily, we’re reviewing them again today (3/17).
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
This is another place where you need to cite your source. Which literature tells us this?
Christian Aguiar
I like the historical context, Jasmin. This could be a great way to begin the script for your video, too.
Christian Aguiar
Since this is an argument based on research – it draws on what scientists know about depression – you need to make it clear what the source is.
Christian Aguiar
Do you mean “personally, some people are inclined…” or perhaps that “some people’s personalities are inclined”?
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Remember, the colon (:) introduces a list like this; the semicolon (;) connects two complete thoughts.
Christian Aguiar
Great context, Jasmin. For your reader to understand your topic, they will need to first understand what depression is. This is a strong opening move.
Christian Aguiar
3
16.7%. Studies show that females are more likely to experience depression compared to the men.
Clinicians have also found that depression is more likely to occur during the late teens to mid-20s.
This age group indicates that college students are the ones who are likely to suffer most from the
effect of depression.
Depression in college students has affected their social life adversely by lowering their
mood, feelings and self-esteem. It has also affected their school life by; making it challenging to
handle their schoolwork and losing interest in activities like sports. It has led to emotional
outbursts such as anger, faulty self-assessments, and lack of energy. Some of the statistics that
show the extent of this problem are; the overall rate of college students that have been reported to
have depression is about 45% (Moeller & Seehuus,
2019).
Suicide has become the third leading cause of death among college students; 76% of those
reported depression. Their first encounter was their mid-20, and nearly two-thirds of students who
developed substance abuse issues reported experiencing depression. These statistics indicate that
this is a significant health crisis among college students.
Another significant factor that makes this a significant issue is that close to 75% of the
students experiencing depression are reluctant to seek help and medication. This brings about an
additional risk of harmful outcomes like; dropping out of college, performing poorly academically,
the risk of substance abuse and a high chance of committing suicide in the event of a full
depression (Ramón-Arbués et al., 2020).
Depression among college students is a serious mental issue that affects in a big way how
the student thinks and behaves and can lead to significant emotional, functional and physical
issues. So it is crucial to understand the causes and effects of this issue among the students and
how it can be treated and even prevented.
Christian Aguiar
Same here, Jasmin. What does this evidence suggest about what might be lacking in colleges, or what college students need?
Christian Aguiar
Before continuing with more evidence, Jasmin, you should explain the significance of this evidence. Do college students need more help? More support?
Christian Aguiar
Can you find a study on how depression impacts schoolwork or activities?
Christian Aguiar
Can you find a scholarly study that explores WHY students might be reluctant to seek help? Are all students equally reluctant? Are there factors that influence them?
Christian Aguiar
I’ve underlined two sections that are both, in a sense, working thesis statements. I think this second one would work better, as it provides an argument you can develop step by step.
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Is this perhaps a continuation of the “some of the statistics” line above? If so, it needs to be in the same paragraph, Jasmin, otherwise your reader will get confused as I have here.
Christian Aguiar
Since there’s just one stat here, it would make more sense to present it directly.
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
This is a strong link between the background and the working thesis, which comes in the next paragraph.
Christian Aguiar
4
Some of the research approaches that can be employed to be able to identify depression in
college students include; getting help from the parents, this is by developing an approach of getting
to know from different parents on the well-being of the child, to be able to assess some of the most
common symptoms that could show depression. This is an essential aspect as it will be easier also
to train the parent on how to handle and provide support if the child is undergoing depression,
through; preparing the child for the unexpected, the importance of staying close, encouraging
healthy habits and developing a plan that is focused on student mental health (Park & Zarate Jr,
2019).
Another research method is designing a purpose design questionnaire that includes records
of sociodemographic data, such as; age, sex, year of study and performance in studies. The
questionnaire will consist of questions that will help measure the rate of depression among the
students. A number of colleges will be picked and select representatives to participate and increase
statistical power. To increase the accuracy of the research, it is essential to ensure that there is a
proportional stratified sampling of the colleges so that all the different age groups are represented.
Also, in the sampling process, the number of representatives to be obtained from each college will
be determined by calculations and proportional to size probability.
References
LeMoult, J., & Gotlib, I. H. (2019). Depression: A cognitive perspective. Clinical Psychology
Review, 69, 51-66.
Christian Aguiar
These aren’t quite research approaches, Jasmin – research approaches would be your lenses, like psychological or educational impacts. These are solutions you could propose.
5
Moeller, R. W., & Seehuus, M. (2019). Loneliness as a mediator for college students’ social skills
and experiences of depression and anxiety. Journal of adolescence, 73, 1-13.
Park, L. T., & Zarate Jr, C. A. (2019). Depression in the primary care setting. New England
Journal of Medicine, 380(6), 559-568.
Ramón-Arbués, E., Gea-Caballero, V., Granada-López, J. M., Juárez-Vela, R., Pellicer-García, B.,
& Antón-Solanas, I. (2020). The prevalence of depression, anxiety and stress and their
associated factors in college students. International Journal of Environmental Research and
Public Health, 17(19), 7001.
Taquet, M., Quoidbach, J., Gross, J. J., Saunders, K. E., & Goodwin, G. M. (2020). Mood
homeostasis, low mood, and history of depression in 2 large population samples. JAMA
Psychiatry, 77(9), 944-951.
Annotated Bibliography
By
Student
IGED210C Discovery Expository Writing
Date Submitted
Working Thesis Statement
Include your working thesis statement here. While not technically part of an annotated bibliography, keeping your thesis in mind while researching will make this process much more helpful.
Annotated Bibliography
Main Strand/Idea One: State the first main idea from your thesis.
Source One: APA-Style Reference
Source One: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Two: APA-Style Reference
Source Two: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Three: APA-Style Reference
Source Three: 1-paragraph annotation
Main Strand/Idea Two: State the second main idea from your thesis.
Source Four: APA-Style Reference
Source Four: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Five: APA-Style Reference
Source Five: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Six: APA-Style Reference
Source Six: 1-paragraph annotation
Main Strand/Idea Three: State the third main idea from your thesis.
Source Seven: APA-Style Reference
Source Seven: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Eight: APA-Style Reference
Source Eight: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Nine: APA-Style Reference
Source Nine: 1-paragraph annotation
Additional Main Strand/Ideas: Continue on if you have more strands. Keep in mind that you will only have time for 3-4 chunks or segments in your vidro
Source Ten: APA-style Reference
Source Ten: 1-paragraph annotation
Running head: MEMO 1
MEMO
Jasmin Linthicum
Professor Aguiar
Discovery Writing
02/23/2022
Title: College student depression
College student depression has been an issue that most of our students are fighting against
within themselves. Anxiety is among the top concerns amongst our college students and it is an
issue that needs urgent actions to be taken. I decided to talk about this problem because the school
realized that most students are recording absenteeism and low grades. It is important to address this
issue because Following research done, 40% of our students are in depression.the st
Anxiety, relationship troubles, lack of sleep, poor diets and eating habits, and a lack of
regular workouts are some of the major causes of student sadness, according to study conducted by
the management. These aren’t the sole causes of depression, therefore it’s critical to involve our
children in discussions that allow them to open up about their issues.
Having a high number of students suffering from depression is very disappointing. The
future of our nation depends on our students and being in our college it is our responsibility to help
them out. Most of the students have been having difficulty in concentration, their performances
have dropped, some will always look exhausted, and some have joined alcoholism. This is a result
of depression that the college students are going through. The impact of depression not only affects
Christian Aguiar
This paragraph repeats some of the earlier ideas; instead of repeating those ideas, this would be a good place to answer the third part of the prompt: What disciplinary lenses will you use?
Christian Aguiar
It can be a little confusing, but for a memo you would NOT indent the paragraphs – it’s business writing – but for your proposal you WILL.
Christian Aguiar
In your preliminary research for the proposal, these are the types of issues you will need to find research backing for.
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
I’m a little confused, Jasmin – who is the management? Are you imagining that this is a memo you’re writing at work?
Christian Aguiar
You make a good case in this first paragraph for the importance of your topic.
Christian Aguiar
Wow, this is a shocking number. Be sure to include the source here, Jasmin, just like we discussed in class.
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Good use of the memo format, Jasmin
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
That’s okay, but the research itself would need to be real, so this information must come from an actual study that you cite.
MEMO 2
the school performances but also the mental ability of our students. They are constantly in a
subconscious state with themselves.
This memo is to call upon every staff to help our students overcome depression and
anxiety. This can be possible if we create more time to interact and offer a listening hear to them.
Through this, they will feel comfortable and will be able to speak out about the problems they face.
Thank you.
Christian Aguiar
I like the creativity here, Jasmin. For the memo assignment, though, you need to talk about your own plans for this class. Are you perhaps going to help your audience understand how to support students struggling with depression?
1
CollegeStudent’s Depression
Jasmin Linthicum
Course Discovery Writing
Professor Aguiar
Date Due 02/24/202
2
College Student’s Depression
2
According to the World Health Organization (WHO), depression is a common and severe
health issue that affects how someone feels, thinks and acts. The most common symptoms of
depression are; having bad moods and feeling very sad, losing interest in the activities that were
once fun, loss of appetite, which in turn will lead to massive weight loss or gain that is not related
to dieting and difficulty in concentrating, thinking or making decisions (LeMoult & Gotlib, 2019).
People become depressed due to various factors; some of the significant social factors that
bring about depression include; encountering traumatic events, separation from parents or
caregivers and being bullied. Personality some people are inclined towards experiencing
depression. For instance, people who tend to hold worries, have a low-self-esteem, are
perfectionists and are very sensitive towards negative criticism naturally have a higher likelihood
of facing depression.
Depression throughout history has always been a health problem for people. According to
articles written by philosophers and writers throughout humanity’s history, there is depression,
which is a health condition. The articles also include some of the continuous struggles that have
been made to find a solution on treating this condition. For instance, the ancient Greeks and
Romans had different thinking on depression. Some of the literature shows that the Greeks had a
notion that depression was a form of evil spirit possession and used exorcism techniques like;
beatings and starvation as “treatments” to cure a person. On the other hand, the Romans thought
depression was a combination of biological and psychological issues and employed gymnastics,
special diet, herbal medicine and music to treat the patients (Taquet et al., 2020).
In our present day, some of the startling statistics concerning depression are; depression
affects approximately one in fifteen adults, that is close to 6.8% annually, and a projection of an
estimated one in six persons will encounter depression at a given point in their life, that is around
Christian Aguiar
All of these statistics come from research, so you need to cite them using an in-text citation like we learned in class. Luckily, we’re reviewing them again today (3/17).
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
This is another place where you need to cite your source. Which literature tells us this?
Christian Aguiar
I like the historical context, Jasmin. This could be a great way to begin the script for your video, too.
Christian Aguiar
Since this is an argument based on research – it draws on what scientists know about depression – you need to make it clear what the source is.
Christian Aguiar
Do you mean “personally, some people are inclined…” or perhaps that “some people’s personalities are inclined”?
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Remember, the colon (:) introduces a list like this; the semicolon (;) connects two complete thoughts.
Christian Aguiar
Great context, Jasmin. For your reader to understand your topic, they will need to first understand what depression is. This is a strong opening move.
Christian Aguiar
3
16.7%. Studies show that females are more likely to experience depression compared to the men.
Clinicians have also found that depression is more likely to occur during the late teens to mid-20s.
This age group indicates that college students are the ones who are likely to suffer most from the
effect of depression.
Depression in college students has affected their social life adversely by lowering their
mood, feelings and self-esteem. It has also affected their school life by; making it challenging to
handle their schoolwork and losing interest in activities like sports. It has led to emotional
outbursts such as anger, faulty self-assessments, and lack of energy. Some of the statistics that
show the extent of this problem are; the overall rate of college students that have been reported to
have depression is about 45% (Moeller & Seehuus,
2019).
Suicide has become the third leading cause of death among college students; 76% of those
reported depression. Their first encounter was their mid-20, and nearly two-thirds of students who
developed substance abuse issues reported experiencing depression. These statistics indicate that
this is a significant health crisis among college students.
Another significant factor that makes this a significant issue is that close to 75% of the
students experiencing depression are reluctant to seek help and medication. This brings about an
additional risk of harmful outcomes like; dropping out of college, performing poorly academically,
the risk of substance abuse and a high chance of committing suicide in the event of a full
depression (Ramón-Arbués et al., 2020).
Depression among college students is a serious mental issue that affects in a big way how
the student thinks and behaves and can lead to significant emotional, functional and physical
issues. So it is crucial to understand the causes and effects of this issue among the students and
how it can be treated and even prevented.
Christian Aguiar
Same here, Jasmin. What does this evidence suggest about what might be lacking in colleges, or what college students need?
Christian Aguiar
Before continuing with more evidence, Jasmin, you should explain the significance of this evidence. Do college students need more help? More support?
Christian Aguiar
Can you find a study on how depression impacts schoolwork or activities?
Christian Aguiar
Can you find a scholarly study that explores WHY students might be reluctant to seek help? Are all students equally reluctant? Are there factors that influence them?
Christian Aguiar
I’ve underlined two sections that are both, in a sense, working thesis statements. I think this second one would work better, as it provides an argument you can develop step by step.
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Is this perhaps a continuation of the “some of the statistics” line above? If so, it needs to be in the same paragraph, Jasmin, otherwise your reader will get confused as I have here.
Christian Aguiar
Since there’s just one stat here, it would make more sense to present it directly.
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
This is a strong link between the background and the working thesis, which comes in the next paragraph.
Christian Aguiar
4
Some of the research approaches that can be employed to be able to identify depression in
college students include; getting help from the parents, this is by developing an approach of getting
to know from different parents on the well-being of the child, to be able to assess some of the most
common symptoms that could show depression. This is an essential aspect as it will be easier also
to train the parent on how to handle and provide support if the child is undergoing depression,
through; preparing the child for the unexpected, the importance of staying close, encouraging
healthy habits and developing a plan that is focused on student mental health (Park & Zarate Jr,
2019).
Another research method is designing a purpose design questionnaire that includes records
of sociodemographic data, such as; age, sex, year of study and performance in studies. The
questionnaire will consist of questions that will help measure the rate of depression among the
students. A number of colleges will be picked and select representatives to participate and increase
statistical power. To increase the accuracy of the research, it is essential to ensure that there is a
proportional stratified sampling of the colleges so that all the different age groups are represented.
Also, in the sampling process, the number of representatives to be obtained from each college will
be determined by calculations and proportional to size probability.
References
LeMoult, J., & Gotlib, I. H. (2019). Depression: A cognitive perspective. Clinical Psychology
Review, 69, 51-66.
Christian Aguiar
These aren’t quite research approaches, Jasmin – research approaches would be your lenses, like psychological or educational impacts. These are solutions you could propose.
5
Moeller, R. W., & Seehuus, M. (2019). Loneliness as a mediator for college students’ social skills
and experiences of depression and anxiety. Journal of adolescence, 73, 1-13.
Park, L. T., & Zarate Jr, C. A. (2019). Depression in the primary care setting. New England
Journal of Medicine, 380(6), 559-568.
Ramón-Arbués, E., Gea-Caballero, V., Granada-López, J. M., Juárez-Vela, R., Pellicer-García, B.,
& Antón-Solanas, I. (2020). The prevalence of depression, anxiety and stress and their
associated factors in college students. International Journal of Environmental Research and
Public Health, 17(19), 7001.
Taquet, M., Quoidbach, J., Gross, J. J., Saunders, K. E., & Goodwin, G. M. (2020). Mood
homeostasis, low mood, and history of depression in 2 large population samples. JAMA
Psychiatry, 77(9), 944-951.
Annotated Bibliography
By
Student
IGED210C Discovery Expository Writing
Date Submitted
Working Thesis Statement
Include your working thesis statement here. While not technically part of an annotated bibliography, keeping your thesis in mind while researching will make this process much more helpful.
Annotated Bibliography
Main Strand/Idea One: State the first main idea from your thesis.
Source One: APA-Style Reference
Source One: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Two: APA-Style Reference
Source Two: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Three: APA-Style Reference
Source Three: 1-paragraph annotation
Main Strand/Idea Two: State the second main idea from your thesis.
Source Four: APA-Style Reference
Source Four: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Five: APA-Style Reference
Source Five: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Six: APA-Style Reference
Source Six: 1-paragraph annotation
Main Strand/Idea Three: State the third main idea from your thesis.
Source Seven: APA-Style Reference
Source Seven: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Eight: APA-Style Reference
Source Eight: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Nine: APA-Style Reference
Source Nine: 1-paragraph annotation
Additional Main Strand/Ideas: Continue on if you have more strands. Keep in mind that you will only have time for 3-4 chunks or segments in your vidro
Source Ten: APA-style Reference
Source Ten: 1-paragraph annotation
Running head: MEMO 1
MEMO
Jasmin Linthicum
Professor Aguiar
Discovery Writing
02/23/2022
Title: College student depression
College student depression has been an issue that most of our students are fighting against
within themselves. Anxiety is among the top concerns amongst our college students and it is an
issue that needs urgent actions to be taken. I decided to talk about this problem because the school
realized that most students are recording absenteeism and low grades. It is important to address this
issue because Following research done, 40% of our students are in depression.the st
Anxiety, relationship troubles, lack of sleep, poor diets and eating habits, and a lack of
regular workouts are some of the major causes of student sadness, according to study conducted by
the management. These aren’t the sole causes of depression, therefore it’s critical to involve our
children in discussions that allow them to open up about their issues.
Having a high number of students suffering from depression is very disappointing. The
future of our nation depends on our students and being in our college it is our responsibility to help
them out. Most of the students have been having difficulty in concentration, their performances
have dropped, some will always look exhausted, and some have joined alcoholism. This is a result
of depression that the college students are going through. The impact of depression not only affects
Christian Aguiar
This paragraph repeats some of the earlier ideas; instead of repeating those ideas, this would be a good place to answer the third part of the prompt: What disciplinary lenses will you use?
Christian Aguiar
It can be a little confusing, but for a memo you would NOT indent the paragraphs – it’s business writing – but for your proposal you WILL.
Christian Aguiar
In your preliminary research for the proposal, these are the types of issues you will need to find research backing for.
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
I’m a little confused, Jasmin – who is the management? Are you imagining that this is a memo you’re writing at work?
Christian Aguiar
You make a good case in this first paragraph for the importance of your topic.
Christian Aguiar
Wow, this is a shocking number. Be sure to include the source here, Jasmin, just like we discussed in class.
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Good use of the memo format, Jasmin
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
That’s okay, but the research itself would need to be real, so this information must come from an actual study that you cite.
MEMO 2
the school performances but also the mental ability of our students. They are constantly in a
subconscious state with themselves.
This memo is to call upon every staff to help our students overcome depression and
anxiety. This can be possible if we create more time to interact and offer a listening hear to them.
Through this, they will feel comfortable and will be able to speak out about the problems they face.
Thank you.
Christian Aguiar
I like the creativity here, Jasmin. For the memo assignment, though, you need to talk about your own plans for this class. Are you perhaps going to help your audience understand how to support students struggling with depression?
1
CollegeStudent’s Depression
Jasmin Linthicum
Course Discovery Writing
Professor Aguiar
Date Due 02/24/202
2
College Student’s Depression
2
According to the World Health Organization (WHO), depression is a common and severe
health issue that affects how someone feels, thinks and acts. The most common symptoms of
depression are; having bad moods and feeling very sad, losing interest in the activities that were
once fun, loss of appetite, which in turn will lead to massive weight loss or gain that is not related
to dieting and difficulty in concentrating, thinking or making decisions (LeMoult & Gotlib, 2019).
People become depressed due to various factors; some of the significant social factors that
bring about depression include; encountering traumatic events, separation from parents or
caregivers and being bullied. Personality some people are inclined towards experiencing
depression. For instance, people who tend to hold worries, have a low-self-esteem, are
perfectionists and are very sensitive towards negative criticism naturally have a higher likelihood
of facing depression.
Depression throughout history has always been a health problem for people. According to
articles written by philosophers and writers throughout humanity’s history, there is depression,
which is a health condition. The articles also include some of the continuous struggles that have
been made to find a solution on treating this condition. For instance, the ancient Greeks and
Romans had different thinking on depression. Some of the literature shows that the Greeks had a
notion that depression was a form of evil spirit possession and used exorcism techniques like;
beatings and starvation as “treatments” to cure a person. On the other hand, the Romans thought
depression was a combination of biological and psychological issues and employed gymnastics,
special diet, herbal medicine and music to treat the patients (Taquet et al., 2020).
In our present day, some of the startling statistics concerning depression are; depression
affects approximately one in fifteen adults, that is close to 6.8% annually, and a projection of an
estimated one in six persons will encounter depression at a given point in their life, that is around
Christian Aguiar
All of these statistics come from research, so you need to cite them using an in-text citation like we learned in class. Luckily, we’re reviewing them again today (3/17).
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
This is another place where you need to cite your source. Which literature tells us this?
Christian Aguiar
I like the historical context, Jasmin. This could be a great way to begin the script for your video, too.
Christian Aguiar
Since this is an argument based on research – it draws on what scientists know about depression – you need to make it clear what the source is.
Christian Aguiar
Do you mean “personally, some people are inclined…” or perhaps that “some people’s personalities are inclined”?
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Remember, the colon (:) introduces a list like this; the semicolon (;) connects two complete thoughts.
Christian Aguiar
Great context, Jasmin. For your reader to understand your topic, they will need to first understand what depression is. This is a strong opening move.
Christian Aguiar
3
16.7%. Studies show that females are more likely to experience depression compared to the men.
Clinicians have also found that depression is more likely to occur during the late teens to mid-20s.
This age group indicates that college students are the ones who are likely to suffer most from the
effect of depression.
Depression in college students has affected their social life adversely by lowering their
mood, feelings and self-esteem. It has also affected their school life by; making it challenging to
handle their schoolwork and losing interest in activities like sports. It has led to emotional
outbursts such as anger, faulty self-assessments, and lack of energy. Some of the statistics that
show the extent of this problem are; the overall rate of college students that have been reported to
have depression is about 45% (Moeller & Seehuus,
2019).
Suicide has become the third leading cause of death among college students; 76% of those
reported depression. Their first encounter was their mid-20, and nearly two-thirds of students who
developed substance abuse issues reported experiencing depression. These statistics indicate that
this is a significant health crisis among college students.
Another significant factor that makes this a significant issue is that close to 75% of the
students experiencing depression are reluctant to seek help and medication. This brings about an
additional risk of harmful outcomes like; dropping out of college, performing poorly academically,
the risk of substance abuse and a high chance of committing suicide in the event of a full
depression (Ramón-Arbués et al., 2020).
Depression among college students is a serious mental issue that affects in a big way how
the student thinks and behaves and can lead to significant emotional, functional and physical
issues. So it is crucial to understand the causes and effects of this issue among the students and
how it can be treated and even prevented.
Christian Aguiar
Same here, Jasmin. What does this evidence suggest about what might be lacking in colleges, or what college students need?
Christian Aguiar
Before continuing with more evidence, Jasmin, you should explain the significance of this evidence. Do college students need more help? More support?
Christian Aguiar
Can you find a study on how depression impacts schoolwork or activities?
Christian Aguiar
Can you find a scholarly study that explores WHY students might be reluctant to seek help? Are all students equally reluctant? Are there factors that influence them?
Christian Aguiar
I’ve underlined two sections that are both, in a sense, working thesis statements. I think this second one would work better, as it provides an argument you can develop step by step.
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Is this perhaps a continuation of the “some of the statistics” line above? If so, it needs to be in the same paragraph, Jasmin, otherwise your reader will get confused as I have here.
Christian Aguiar
Since there’s just one stat here, it would make more sense to present it directly.
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
This is a strong link between the background and the working thesis, which comes in the next paragraph.
Christian Aguiar
4
Some of the research approaches that can be employed to be able to identify depression in
college students include; getting help from the parents, this is by developing an approach of getting
to know from different parents on the well-being of the child, to be able to assess some of the most
common symptoms that could show depression. This is an essential aspect as it will be easier also
to train the parent on how to handle and provide support if the child is undergoing depression,
through; preparing the child for the unexpected, the importance of staying close, encouraging
healthy habits and developing a plan that is focused on student mental health (Park & Zarate Jr,
2019).
Another research method is designing a purpose design questionnaire that includes records
of sociodemographic data, such as; age, sex, year of study and performance in studies. The
questionnaire will consist of questions that will help measure the rate of depression among the
students. A number of colleges will be picked and select representatives to participate and increase
statistical power. To increase the accuracy of the research, it is essential to ensure that there is a
proportional stratified sampling of the colleges so that all the different age groups are represented.
Also, in the sampling process, the number of representatives to be obtained from each college will
be determined by calculations and proportional to size probability.
References
LeMoult, J., & Gotlib, I. H. (2019). Depression: A cognitive perspective. Clinical Psychology
Review, 69, 51-66.
Christian Aguiar
These aren’t quite research approaches, Jasmin – research approaches would be your lenses, like psychological or educational impacts. These are solutions you could propose.
5
Moeller, R. W., & Seehuus, M. (2019). Loneliness as a mediator for college students’ social skills
and experiences of depression and anxiety. Journal of adolescence, 73, 1-13.
Park, L. T., & Zarate Jr, C. A. (2019). Depression in the primary care setting. New England
Journal of Medicine, 380(6), 559-568.
Ramón-Arbués, E., Gea-Caballero, V., Granada-López, J. M., Juárez-Vela, R., Pellicer-García, B.,
& Antón-Solanas, I. (2020). The prevalence of depression, anxiety and stress and their
associated factors in college students. International Journal of Environmental Research and
Public Health, 17(19), 7001.
Taquet, M., Quoidbach, J., Gross, J. J., Saunders, K. E., & Goodwin, G. M. (2020). Mood
homeostasis, low mood, and history of depression in 2 large population samples. JAMA
Psychiatry, 77(9), 944-951.
Annotated Bibliography
By
Student
IGED210C Discovery Expository Writing
Date Submitted
Working Thesis Statement
Include your working thesis statement here. While not technically part of an annotated bibliography, keeping your thesis in mind while researching will make this process much more helpful.
Annotated Bibliography
Main Strand/Idea One: State the first main idea from your thesis.
Source One: APA-Style Reference
Source One: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Two: APA-Style Reference
Source Two: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Three: APA-Style Reference
Source Three: 1-paragraph annotation
Main Strand/Idea Two: State the second main idea from your thesis.
Source Four: APA-Style Reference
Source Four: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Five: APA-Style Reference
Source Five: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Six: APA-Style Reference
Source Six: 1-paragraph annotation
Main Strand/Idea Three: State the third main idea from your thesis.
Source Seven: APA-Style Reference
Source Seven: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Eight: APA-Style Reference
Source Eight: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Nine: APA-Style Reference
Source Nine: 1-paragraph annotation
Additional Main Strand/Ideas: Continue on if you have more strands. Keep in mind that you will only have time for 3-4 chunks or segments in your vidro
Source Ten: APA-style Reference
Source Ten: 1-paragraph annotation
Running head: MEMO 1
MEMO
Jasmin Linthicum
Professor Aguiar
Discovery Writing
02/23/2022
Title: College student depression
College student depression has been an issue that most of our students are fighting against
within themselves. Anxiety is among the top concerns amongst our college students and it is an
issue that needs urgent actions to be taken. I decided to talk about this problem because the school
realized that most students are recording absenteeism and low grades. It is important to address this
issue because Following research done, 40% of our students are in depression.the st
Anxiety, relationship troubles, lack of sleep, poor diets and eating habits, and a lack of
regular workouts are some of the major causes of student sadness, according to study conducted by
the management. These aren’t the sole causes of depression, therefore it’s critical to involve our
children in discussions that allow them to open up about their issues.
Having a high number of students suffering from depression is very disappointing. The
future of our nation depends on our students and being in our college it is our responsibility to help
them out. Most of the students have been having difficulty in concentration, their performances
have dropped, some will always look exhausted, and some have joined alcoholism. This is a result
of depression that the college students are going through. The impact of depression not only affects
Christian Aguiar
This paragraph repeats some of the earlier ideas; instead of repeating those ideas, this would be a good place to answer the third part of the prompt: What disciplinary lenses will you use?
Christian Aguiar
It can be a little confusing, but for a memo you would NOT indent the paragraphs – it’s business writing – but for your proposal you WILL.
Christian Aguiar
In your preliminary research for the proposal, these are the types of issues you will need to find research backing for.
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
I’m a little confused, Jasmin – who is the management? Are you imagining that this is a memo you’re writing at work?
Christian Aguiar
You make a good case in this first paragraph for the importance of your topic.
Christian Aguiar
Wow, this is a shocking number. Be sure to include the source here, Jasmin, just like we discussed in class.
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Good use of the memo format, Jasmin
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
That’s okay, but the research itself would need to be real, so this information must come from an actual study that you cite.
MEMO 2
the school performances but also the mental ability of our students. They are constantly in a
subconscious state with themselves.
This memo is to call upon every staff to help our students overcome depression and
anxiety. This can be possible if we create more time to interact and offer a listening hear to them.
Through this, they will feel comfortable and will be able to speak out about the problems they face.
Thank you.
Christian Aguiar
I like the creativity here, Jasmin. For the memo assignment, though, you need to talk about your own plans for this class. Are you perhaps going to help your audience understand how to support students struggling with depression?
1
CollegeStudent’s Depression
Jasmin Linthicum
Course Discovery Writing
Professor Aguiar
Date Due 02/24/202
2
College Student’s Depression
2
According to the World Health Organization (WHO), depression is a common and severe
health issue that affects how someone feels, thinks and acts. The most common symptoms of
depression are; having bad moods and feeling very sad, losing interest in the activities that were
once fun, loss of appetite, which in turn will lead to massive weight loss or gain that is not related
to dieting and difficulty in concentrating, thinking or making decisions (LeMoult & Gotlib, 2019).
People become depressed due to various factors; some of the significant social factors that
bring about depression include; encountering traumatic events, separation from parents or
caregivers and being bullied. Personality some people are inclined towards experiencing
depression. For instance, people who tend to hold worries, have a low-self-esteem, are
perfectionists and are very sensitive towards negative criticism naturally have a higher likelihood
of facing depression.
Depression throughout history has always been a health problem for people. According to
articles written by philosophers and writers throughout humanity’s history, there is depression,
which is a health condition. The articles also include some of the continuous struggles that have
been made to find a solution on treating this condition. For instance, the ancient Greeks and
Romans had different thinking on depression. Some of the literature shows that the Greeks had a
notion that depression was a form of evil spirit possession and used exorcism techniques like;
beatings and starvation as “treatments” to cure a person. On the other hand, the Romans thought
depression was a combination of biological and psychological issues and employed gymnastics,
special diet, herbal medicine and music to treat the patients (Taquet et al., 2020).
In our present day, some of the startling statistics concerning depression are; depression
affects approximately one in fifteen adults, that is close to 6.8% annually, and a projection of an
estimated one in six persons will encounter depression at a given point in their life, that is around
Christian Aguiar
All of these statistics come from research, so you need to cite them using an in-text citation like we learned in class. Luckily, we’re reviewing them again today (3/17).
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
This is another place where you need to cite your source. Which literature tells us this?
Christian Aguiar
I like the historical context, Jasmin. This could be a great way to begin the script for your video, too.
Christian Aguiar
Since this is an argument based on research – it draws on what scientists know about depression – you need to make it clear what the source is.
Christian Aguiar
Do you mean “personally, some people are inclined…” or perhaps that “some people’s personalities are inclined”?
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Remember, the colon (:) introduces a list like this; the semicolon (;) connects two complete thoughts.
Christian Aguiar
Great context, Jasmin. For your reader to understand your topic, they will need to first understand what depression is. This is a strong opening move.
Christian Aguiar
3
16.7%. Studies show that females are more likely to experience depression compared to the men.
Clinicians have also found that depression is more likely to occur during the late teens to mid-20s.
This age group indicates that college students are the ones who are likely to suffer most from the
effect of depression.
Depression in college students has affected their social life adversely by lowering their
mood, feelings and self-esteem. It has also affected their school life by; making it challenging to
handle their schoolwork and losing interest in activities like sports. It has led to emotional
outbursts such as anger, faulty self-assessments, and lack of energy. Some of the statistics that
show the extent of this problem are; the overall rate of college students that have been reported to
have depression is about 45% (Moeller & Seehuus,
2019).
Suicide has become the third leading cause of death among college students; 76% of those
reported depression. Their first encounter was their mid-20, and nearly two-thirds of students who
developed substance abuse issues reported experiencing depression. These statistics indicate that
this is a significant health crisis among college students.
Another significant factor that makes this a significant issue is that close to 75% of the
students experiencing depression are reluctant to seek help and medication. This brings about an
additional risk of harmful outcomes like; dropping out of college, performing poorly academically,
the risk of substance abuse and a high chance of committing suicide in the event of a full
depression (Ramón-Arbués et al., 2020).
Depression among college students is a serious mental issue that affects in a big way how
the student thinks and behaves and can lead to significant emotional, functional and physical
issues. So it is crucial to understand the causes and effects of this issue among the students and
how it can be treated and even prevented.
Christian Aguiar
Same here, Jasmin. What does this evidence suggest about what might be lacking in colleges, or what college students need?
Christian Aguiar
Before continuing with more evidence, Jasmin, you should explain the significance of this evidence. Do college students need more help? More support?
Christian Aguiar
Can you find a study on how depression impacts schoolwork or activities?
Christian Aguiar
Can you find a scholarly study that explores WHY students might be reluctant to seek help? Are all students equally reluctant? Are there factors that influence them?
Christian Aguiar
I’ve underlined two sections that are both, in a sense, working thesis statements. I think this second one would work better, as it provides an argument you can develop step by step.
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Is this perhaps a continuation of the “some of the statistics” line above? If so, it needs to be in the same paragraph, Jasmin, otherwise your reader will get confused as I have here.
Christian Aguiar
Since there’s just one stat here, it would make more sense to present it directly.
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
This is a strong link between the background and the working thesis, which comes in the next paragraph.
Christian Aguiar
4
Some of the research approaches that can be employed to be able to identify depression in
college students include; getting help from the parents, this is by developing an approach of getting
to know from different parents on the well-being of the child, to be able to assess some of the most
common symptoms that could show depression. This is an essential aspect as it will be easier also
to train the parent on how to handle and provide support if the child is undergoing depression,
through; preparing the child for the unexpected, the importance of staying close, encouraging
healthy habits and developing a plan that is focused on student mental health (Park & Zarate Jr,
2019).
Another research method is designing a purpose design questionnaire that includes records
of sociodemographic data, such as; age, sex, year of study and performance in studies. The
questionnaire will consist of questions that will help measure the rate of depression among the
students. A number of colleges will be picked and select representatives to participate and increase
statistical power. To increase the accuracy of the research, it is essential to ensure that there is a
proportional stratified sampling of the colleges so that all the different age groups are represented.
Also, in the sampling process, the number of representatives to be obtained from each college will
be determined by calculations and proportional to size probability.
References
LeMoult, J., & Gotlib, I. H. (2019). Depression: A cognitive perspective. Clinical Psychology
Review, 69, 51-66.
Christian Aguiar
These aren’t quite research approaches, Jasmin – research approaches would be your lenses, like psychological or educational impacts. These are solutions you could propose.
5
Moeller, R. W., & Seehuus, M. (2019). Loneliness as a mediator for college students’ social skills
and experiences of depression and anxiety. Journal of adolescence, 73, 1-13.
Park, L. T., & Zarate Jr, C. A. (2019). Depression in the primary care setting. New England
Journal of Medicine, 380(6), 559-568.
Ramón-Arbués, E., Gea-Caballero, V., Granada-López, J. M., Juárez-Vela, R., Pellicer-García, B.,
& Antón-Solanas, I. (2020). The prevalence of depression, anxiety and stress and their
associated factors in college students. International Journal of Environmental Research and
Public Health, 17(19), 7001.
Taquet, M., Quoidbach, J., Gross, J. J., Saunders, K. E., & Goodwin, G. M. (2020). Mood
homeostasis, low mood, and history of depression in 2 large population samples. JAMA
Psychiatry, 77(9), 944-951.
Annotated Bibliography
By
Student
IGED210C Discovery Expository Writing
Date Submitted
Working Thesis Statement
Include your working thesis statement here. While not technically part of an annotated bibliography, keeping your thesis in mind while researching will make this process much more helpful.
Annotated Bibliography
Main Strand/Idea One: State the first main idea from your thesis.
Source One: APA-Style Reference
Source One: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Two: APA-Style Reference
Source Two: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Three: APA-Style Reference
Source Three: 1-paragraph annotation
Main Strand/Idea Two: State the second main idea from your thesis.
Source Four: APA-Style Reference
Source Four: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Five: APA-Style Reference
Source Five: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Six: APA-Style Reference
Source Six: 1-paragraph annotation
Main Strand/Idea Three: State the third main idea from your thesis.
Source Seven: APA-Style Reference
Source Seven: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Eight: APA-Style Reference
Source Eight: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Nine: APA-Style Reference
Source Nine: 1-paragraph annotation
Additional Main Strand/Ideas: Continue on if you have more strands. Keep in mind that you will only have time for 3-4 chunks or segments in your vidro
Source Ten: APA-style Reference
Source Ten: 1-paragraph annotation
Running head: MEMO 1
MEMO
Jasmin Linthicum
Professor Aguiar
Discovery Writing
02/23/2022
Title: College student depression
College student depression has been an issue that most of our students are fighting against
within themselves. Anxiety is among the top concerns amongst our college students and it is an
issue that needs urgent actions to be taken. I decided to talk about this problem because the school
realized that most students are recording absenteeism and low grades. It is important to address this
issue because Following research done, 40% of our students are in depression.the st
Anxiety, relationship troubles, lack of sleep, poor diets and eating habits, and a lack of
regular workouts are some of the major causes of student sadness, according to study conducted by
the management. These aren’t the sole causes of depression, therefore it’s critical to involve our
children in discussions that allow them to open up about their issues.
Having a high number of students suffering from depression is very disappointing. The
future of our nation depends on our students and being in our college it is our responsibility to help
them out. Most of the students have been having difficulty in concentration, their performances
have dropped, some will always look exhausted, and some have joined alcoholism. This is a result
of depression that the college students are going through. The impact of depression not only affects
Christian Aguiar
This paragraph repeats some of the earlier ideas; instead of repeating those ideas, this would be a good place to answer the third part of the prompt: What disciplinary lenses will you use?
Christian Aguiar
It can be a little confusing, but for a memo you would NOT indent the paragraphs – it’s business writing – but for your proposal you WILL.
Christian Aguiar
In your preliminary research for the proposal, these are the types of issues you will need to find research backing for.
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
I’m a little confused, Jasmin – who is the management? Are you imagining that this is a memo you’re writing at work?
Christian Aguiar
You make a good case in this first paragraph for the importance of your topic.
Christian Aguiar
Wow, this is a shocking number. Be sure to include the source here, Jasmin, just like we discussed in class.
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Good use of the memo format, Jasmin
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
That’s okay, but the research itself would need to be real, so this information must come from an actual study that you cite.
MEMO 2
the school performances but also the mental ability of our students. They are constantly in a
subconscious state with themselves.
This memo is to call upon every staff to help our students overcome depression and
anxiety. This can be possible if we create more time to interact and offer a listening hear to them.
Through this, they will feel comfortable and will be able to speak out about the problems they face.
Thank you.
Christian Aguiar
I like the creativity here, Jasmin. For the memo assignment, though, you need to talk about your own plans for this class. Are you perhaps going to help your audience understand how to support students struggling with depression?
1
CollegeStudent’s Depression
Jasmin Linthicum
Course Discovery Writing
Professor Aguiar
Date Due 02/24/202
2
College Student’s Depression
2
According to the World Health Organization (WHO), depression is a common and severe
health issue that affects how someone feels, thinks and acts. The most common symptoms of
depression are; having bad moods and feeling very sad, losing interest in the activities that were
once fun, loss of appetite, which in turn will lead to massive weight loss or gain that is not related
to dieting and difficulty in concentrating, thinking or making decisions (LeMoult & Gotlib, 2019).
People become depressed due to various factors; some of the significant social factors that
bring about depression include; encountering traumatic events, separation from parents or
caregivers and being bullied. Personality some people are inclined towards experiencing
depression. For instance, people who tend to hold worries, have a low-self-esteem, are
perfectionists and are very sensitive towards negative criticism naturally have a higher likelihood
of facing depression.
Depression throughout history has always been a health problem for people. According to
articles written by philosophers and writers throughout humanity’s history, there is depression,
which is a health condition. The articles also include some of the continuous struggles that have
been made to find a solution on treating this condition. For instance, the ancient Greeks and
Romans had different thinking on depression. Some of the literature shows that the Greeks had a
notion that depression was a form of evil spirit possession and used exorcism techniques like;
beatings and starvation as “treatments” to cure a person. On the other hand, the Romans thought
depression was a combination of biological and psychological issues and employed gymnastics,
special diet, herbal medicine and music to treat the patients (Taquet et al., 2020).
In our present day, some of the startling statistics concerning depression are; depression
affects approximately one in fifteen adults, that is close to 6.8% annually, and a projection of an
estimated one in six persons will encounter depression at a given point in their life, that is around
Christian Aguiar
All of these statistics come from research, so you need to cite them using an in-text citation like we learned in class. Luckily, we’re reviewing them again today (3/17).
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
This is another place where you need to cite your source. Which literature tells us this?
Christian Aguiar
I like the historical context, Jasmin. This could be a great way to begin the script for your video, too.
Christian Aguiar
Since this is an argument based on research – it draws on what scientists know about depression – you need to make it clear what the source is.
Christian Aguiar
Do you mean “personally, some people are inclined…” or perhaps that “some people’s personalities are inclined”?
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Remember, the colon (:) introduces a list like this; the semicolon (;) connects two complete thoughts.
Christian Aguiar
Great context, Jasmin. For your reader to understand your topic, they will need to first understand what depression is. This is a strong opening move.
Christian Aguiar
3
16.7%. Studies show that females are more likely to experience depression compared to the men.
Clinicians have also found that depression is more likely to occur during the late teens to mid-20s.
This age group indicates that college students are the ones who are likely to suffer most from the
effect of depression.
Depression in college students has affected their social life adversely by lowering their
mood, feelings and self-esteem. It has also affected their school life by; making it challenging to
handle their schoolwork and losing interest in activities like sports. It has led to emotional
outbursts such as anger, faulty self-assessments, and lack of energy. Some of the statistics that
show the extent of this problem are; the overall rate of college students that have been reported to
have depression is about 45% (Moeller & Seehuus,
2019).
Suicide has become the third leading cause of death among college students; 76% of those
reported depression. Their first encounter was their mid-20, and nearly two-thirds of students who
developed substance abuse issues reported experiencing depression. These statistics indicate that
this is a significant health crisis among college students.
Another significant factor that makes this a significant issue is that close to 75% of the
students experiencing depression are reluctant to seek help and medication. This brings about an
additional risk of harmful outcomes like; dropping out of college, performing poorly academically,
the risk of substance abuse and a high chance of committing suicide in the event of a full
depression (Ramón-Arbués et al., 2020).
Depression among college students is a serious mental issue that affects in a big way how
the student thinks and behaves and can lead to significant emotional, functional and physical
issues. So it is crucial to understand the causes and effects of this issue among the students and
how it can be treated and even prevented.
Christian Aguiar
Same here, Jasmin. What does this evidence suggest about what might be lacking in colleges, or what college students need?
Christian Aguiar
Before continuing with more evidence, Jasmin, you should explain the significance of this evidence. Do college students need more help? More support?
Christian Aguiar
Can you find a study on how depression impacts schoolwork or activities?
Christian Aguiar
Can you find a scholarly study that explores WHY students might be reluctant to seek help? Are all students equally reluctant? Are there factors that influence them?
Christian Aguiar
I’ve underlined two sections that are both, in a sense, working thesis statements. I think this second one would work better, as it provides an argument you can develop step by step.
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Is this perhaps a continuation of the “some of the statistics” line above? If so, it needs to be in the same paragraph, Jasmin, otherwise your reader will get confused as I have here.
Christian Aguiar
Since there’s just one stat here, it would make more sense to present it directly.
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
This is a strong link between the background and the working thesis, which comes in the next paragraph.
Christian Aguiar
4
Some of the research approaches that can be employed to be able to identify depression in
college students include; getting help from the parents, this is by developing an approach of getting
to know from different parents on the well-being of the child, to be able to assess some of the most
common symptoms that could show depression. This is an essential aspect as it will be easier also
to train the parent on how to handle and provide support if the child is undergoing depression,
through; preparing the child for the unexpected, the importance of staying close, encouraging
healthy habits and developing a plan that is focused on student mental health (Park & Zarate Jr,
2019).
Another research method is designing a purpose design questionnaire that includes records
of sociodemographic data, such as; age, sex, year of study and performance in studies. The
questionnaire will consist of questions that will help measure the rate of depression among the
students. A number of colleges will be picked and select representatives to participate and increase
statistical power. To increase the accuracy of the research, it is essential to ensure that there is a
proportional stratified sampling of the colleges so that all the different age groups are represented.
Also, in the sampling process, the number of representatives to be obtained from each college will
be determined by calculations and proportional to size probability.
References
LeMoult, J., & Gotlib, I. H. (2019). Depression: A cognitive perspective. Clinical Psychology
Review, 69, 51-66.
Christian Aguiar
These aren’t quite research approaches, Jasmin – research approaches would be your lenses, like psychological or educational impacts. These are solutions you could propose.
5
Moeller, R. W., & Seehuus, M. (2019). Loneliness as a mediator for college students’ social skills
and experiences of depression and anxiety. Journal of adolescence, 73, 1-13.
Park, L. T., & Zarate Jr, C. A. (2019). Depression in the primary care setting. New England
Journal of Medicine, 380(6), 559-568.
Ramón-Arbués, E., Gea-Caballero, V., Granada-López, J. M., Juárez-Vela, R., Pellicer-García, B.,
& Antón-Solanas, I. (2020). The prevalence of depression, anxiety and stress and their
associated factors in college students. International Journal of Environmental Research and
Public Health, 17(19), 7001.
Taquet, M., Quoidbach, J., Gross, J. J., Saunders, K. E., & Goodwin, G. M. (2020). Mood
homeostasis, low mood, and history of depression in 2 large population samples. JAMA
Psychiatry, 77(9), 944-951.
Annotated Bibliography
By
Student
IGED210C Discovery Expository Writing
Date Submitted
Working Thesis Statement
Include your working thesis statement here. While not technically part of an annotated bibliography, keeping your thesis in mind while researching will make this process much more helpful.
Annotated Bibliography
Main Strand/Idea One: State the first main idea from your thesis.
Source One: APA-Style Reference
Source One: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Two: APA-Style Reference
Source Two: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Three: APA-Style Reference
Source Three: 1-paragraph annotation
Main Strand/Idea Two: State the second main idea from your thesis.
Source Four: APA-Style Reference
Source Four: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Five: APA-Style Reference
Source Five: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Six: APA-Style Reference
Source Six: 1-paragraph annotation
Main Strand/Idea Three: State the third main idea from your thesis.
Source Seven: APA-Style Reference
Source Seven: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Eight: APA-Style Reference
Source Eight: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Nine: APA-Style Reference
Source Nine: 1-paragraph annotation
Additional Main Strand/Ideas: Continue on if you have more strands. Keep in mind that you will only have time for 3-4 chunks or segments in your vidro
Source Ten: APA-style Reference
Source Ten: 1-paragraph annotation
Running head: MEMO 1
MEMO
Jasmin Linthicum
Professor Aguiar
Discovery Writing
02/23/2022
Title: College student depression
College student depression has been an issue that most of our students are fighting against
within themselves. Anxiety is among the top concerns amongst our college students and it is an
issue that needs urgent actions to be taken. I decided to talk about this problem because the school
realized that most students are recording absenteeism and low grades. It is important to address this
issue because Following research done, 40% of our students are in depression.the st
Anxiety, relationship troubles, lack of sleep, poor diets and eating habits, and a lack of
regular workouts are some of the major causes of student sadness, according to study conducted by
the management. These aren’t the sole causes of depression, therefore it’s critical to involve our
children in discussions that allow them to open up about their issues.
Having a high number of students suffering from depression is very disappointing. The
future of our nation depends on our students and being in our college it is our responsibility to help
them out. Most of the students have been having difficulty in concentration, their performances
have dropped, some will always look exhausted, and some have joined alcoholism. This is a result
of depression that the college students are going through. The impact of depression not only affects
Christian Aguiar
This paragraph repeats some of the earlier ideas; instead of repeating those ideas, this would be a good place to answer the third part of the prompt: What disciplinary lenses will you use?
Christian Aguiar
It can be a little confusing, but for a memo you would NOT indent the paragraphs – it’s business writing – but for your proposal you WILL.
Christian Aguiar
In your preliminary research for the proposal, these are the types of issues you will need to find research backing for.
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
I’m a little confused, Jasmin – who is the management? Are you imagining that this is a memo you’re writing at work?
Christian Aguiar
You make a good case in this first paragraph for the importance of your topic.
Christian Aguiar
Wow, this is a shocking number. Be sure to include the source here, Jasmin, just like we discussed in class.
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Good use of the memo format, Jasmin
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
That’s okay, but the research itself would need to be real, so this information must come from an actual study that you cite.
MEMO 2
the school performances but also the mental ability of our students. They are constantly in a
subconscious state with themselves.
This memo is to call upon every staff to help our students overcome depression and
anxiety. This can be possible if we create more time to interact and offer a listening hear to them.
Through this, they will feel comfortable and will be able to speak out about the problems they face.
Thank you.
Christian Aguiar
I like the creativity here, Jasmin. For the memo assignment, though, you need to talk about your own plans for this class. Are you perhaps going to help your audience understand how to support students struggling with depression?
1
CollegeStudent’s Depression
Jasmin Linthicum
Course Discovery Writing
Professor Aguiar
Date Due 02/24/202
2
College Student’s Depression
2
According to the World Health Organization (WHO), depression is a common and severe
health issue that affects how someone feels, thinks and acts. The most common symptoms of
depression are; having bad moods and feeling very sad, losing interest in the activities that were
once fun, loss of appetite, which in turn will lead to massive weight loss or gain that is not related
to dieting and difficulty in concentrating, thinking or making decisions (LeMoult & Gotlib, 2019).
People become depressed due to various factors; some of the significant social factors that
bring about depression include; encountering traumatic events, separation from parents or
caregivers and being bullied. Personality some people are inclined towards experiencing
depression. For instance, people who tend to hold worries, have a low-self-esteem, are
perfectionists and are very sensitive towards negative criticism naturally have a higher likelihood
of facing depression.
Depression throughout history has always been a health problem for people. According to
articles written by philosophers and writers throughout humanity’s history, there is depression,
which is a health condition. The articles also include some of the continuous struggles that have
been made to find a solution on treating this condition. For instance, the ancient Greeks and
Romans had different thinking on depression. Some of the literature shows that the Greeks had a
notion that depression was a form of evil spirit possession and used exorcism techniques like;
beatings and starvation as “treatments” to cure a person. On the other hand, the Romans thought
depression was a combination of biological and psychological issues and employed gymnastics,
special diet, herbal medicine and music to treat the patients (Taquet et al., 2020).
In our present day, some of the startling statistics concerning depression are; depression
affects approximately one in fifteen adults, that is close to 6.8% annually, and a projection of an
estimated one in six persons will encounter depression at a given point in their life, that is around
Christian Aguiar
All of these statistics come from research, so you need to cite them using an in-text citation like we learned in class. Luckily, we’re reviewing them again today (3/17).
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
This is another place where you need to cite your source. Which literature tells us this?
Christian Aguiar
I like the historical context, Jasmin. This could be a great way to begin the script for your video, too.
Christian Aguiar
Since this is an argument based on research – it draws on what scientists know about depression – you need to make it clear what the source is.
Christian Aguiar
Do you mean “personally, some people are inclined…” or perhaps that “some people’s personalities are inclined”?
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Remember, the colon (:) introduces a list like this; the semicolon (;) connects two complete thoughts.
Christian Aguiar
Great context, Jasmin. For your reader to understand your topic, they will need to first understand what depression is. This is a strong opening move.
Christian Aguiar
3
16.7%. Studies show that females are more likely to experience depression compared to the men.
Clinicians have also found that depression is more likely to occur during the late teens to mid-20s.
This age group indicates that college students are the ones who are likely to suffer most from the
effect of depression.
Depression in college students has affected their social life adversely by lowering their
mood, feelings and self-esteem. It has also affected their school life by; making it challenging to
handle their schoolwork and losing interest in activities like sports. It has led to emotional
outbursts such as anger, faulty self-assessments, and lack of energy. Some of the statistics that
show the extent of this problem are; the overall rate of college students that have been reported to
have depression is about 45% (Moeller & Seehuus,
2019).
Suicide has become the third leading cause of death among college students; 76% of those
reported depression. Their first encounter was their mid-20, and nearly two-thirds of students who
developed substance abuse issues reported experiencing depression. These statistics indicate that
this is a significant health crisis among college students.
Another significant factor that makes this a significant issue is that close to 75% of the
students experiencing depression are reluctant to seek help and medication. This brings about an
additional risk of harmful outcomes like; dropping out of college, performing poorly academically,
the risk of substance abuse and a high chance of committing suicide in the event of a full
depression (Ramón-Arbués et al., 2020).
Depression among college students is a serious mental issue that affects in a big way how
the student thinks and behaves and can lead to significant emotional, functional and physical
issues. So it is crucial to understand the causes and effects of this issue among the students and
how it can be treated and even prevented.
Christian Aguiar
Same here, Jasmin. What does this evidence suggest about what might be lacking in colleges, or what college students need?
Christian Aguiar
Before continuing with more evidence, Jasmin, you should explain the significance of this evidence. Do college students need more help? More support?
Christian Aguiar
Can you find a study on how depression impacts schoolwork or activities?
Christian Aguiar
Can you find a scholarly study that explores WHY students might be reluctant to seek help? Are all students equally reluctant? Are there factors that influence them?
Christian Aguiar
I’ve underlined two sections that are both, in a sense, working thesis statements. I think this second one would work better, as it provides an argument you can develop step by step.
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Is this perhaps a continuation of the “some of the statistics” line above? If so, it needs to be in the same paragraph, Jasmin, otherwise your reader will get confused as I have here.
Christian Aguiar
Since there’s just one stat here, it would make more sense to present it directly.
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
This is a strong link between the background and the working thesis, which comes in the next paragraph.
Christian Aguiar
4
Some of the research approaches that can be employed to be able to identify depression in
college students include; getting help from the parents, this is by developing an approach of getting
to know from different parents on the well-being of the child, to be able to assess some of the most
common symptoms that could show depression. This is an essential aspect as it will be easier also
to train the parent on how to handle and provide support if the child is undergoing depression,
through; preparing the child for the unexpected, the importance of staying close, encouraging
healthy habits and developing a plan that is focused on student mental health (Park & Zarate Jr,
2019).
Another research method is designing a purpose design questionnaire that includes records
of sociodemographic data, such as; age, sex, year of study and performance in studies. The
questionnaire will consist of questions that will help measure the rate of depression among the
students. A number of colleges will be picked and select representatives to participate and increase
statistical power. To increase the accuracy of the research, it is essential to ensure that there is a
proportional stratified sampling of the colleges so that all the different age groups are represented.
Also, in the sampling process, the number of representatives to be obtained from each college will
be determined by calculations and proportional to size probability.
References
LeMoult, J., & Gotlib, I. H. (2019). Depression: A cognitive perspective. Clinical Psychology
Review, 69, 51-66.
Christian Aguiar
These aren’t quite research approaches, Jasmin – research approaches would be your lenses, like psychological or educational impacts. These are solutions you could propose.
5
Moeller, R. W., & Seehuus, M. (2019). Loneliness as a mediator for college students’ social skills
and experiences of depression and anxiety. Journal of adolescence, 73, 1-13.
Park, L. T., & Zarate Jr, C. A. (2019). Depression in the primary care setting. New England
Journal of Medicine, 380(6), 559-568.
Ramón-Arbués, E., Gea-Caballero, V., Granada-López, J. M., Juárez-Vela, R., Pellicer-García, B.,
& Antón-Solanas, I. (2020). The prevalence of depression, anxiety and stress and their
associated factors in college students. International Journal of Environmental Research and
Public Health, 17(19), 7001.
Taquet, M., Quoidbach, J., Gross, J. J., Saunders, K. E., & Goodwin, G. M. (2020). Mood
homeostasis, low mood, and history of depression in 2 large population samples. JAMA
Psychiatry, 77(9), 944-951.
Annotated Bibliography
By
Student
IGED210C Discovery Expository Writing
Date Submitted
Working Thesis Statement
Include your working thesis statement here. While not technically part of an annotated bibliography, keeping your thesis in mind while researching will make this process much more helpful.
Annotated Bibliography
Main Strand/Idea One: State the first main idea from your thesis.
Source One: APA-Style Reference
Source One: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Two: APA-Style Reference
Source Two: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Three: APA-Style Reference
Source Three: 1-paragraph annotation
Main Strand/Idea Two: State the second main idea from your thesis.
Source Four: APA-Style Reference
Source Four: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Five: APA-Style Reference
Source Five: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Six: APA-Style Reference
Source Six: 1-paragraph annotation
Main Strand/Idea Three: State the third main idea from your thesis.
Source Seven: APA-Style Reference
Source Seven: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Eight: APA-Style Reference
Source Eight: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Nine: APA-Style Reference
Source Nine: 1-paragraph annotation
Additional Main Strand/Ideas: Continue on if you have more strands. Keep in mind that you will only have time for 3-4 chunks or segments in your vidro
Source Ten: APA-style Reference
Source Ten: 1-paragraph annotation
Running head: MEMO 1
MEMO
Jasmin Linthicum
Professor Aguiar
Discovery Writing
02/23/2022
Title: College student depression
College student depression has been an issue that most of our students are fighting against
within themselves. Anxiety is among the top concerns amongst our college students and it is an
issue that needs urgent actions to be taken. I decided to talk about this problem because the school
realized that most students are recording absenteeism and low grades. It is important to address this
issue because Following research done, 40% of our students are in depression.the st
Anxiety, relationship troubles, lack of sleep, poor diets and eating habits, and a lack of
regular workouts are some of the major causes of student sadness, according to study conducted by
the management. These aren’t the sole causes of depression, therefore it’s critical to involve our
children in discussions that allow them to open up about their issues.
Having a high number of students suffering from depression is very disappointing. The
future of our nation depends on our students and being in our college it is our responsibility to help
them out. Most of the students have been having difficulty in concentration, their performances
have dropped, some will always look exhausted, and some have joined alcoholism. This is a result
of depression that the college students are going through. The impact of depression not only affects
Christian Aguiar
This paragraph repeats some of the earlier ideas; instead of repeating those ideas, this would be a good place to answer the third part of the prompt: What disciplinary lenses will you use?
Christian Aguiar
It can be a little confusing, but for a memo you would NOT indent the paragraphs – it’s business writing – but for your proposal you WILL.
Christian Aguiar
In your preliminary research for the proposal, these are the types of issues you will need to find research backing for.
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
I’m a little confused, Jasmin – who is the management? Are you imagining that this is a memo you’re writing at work?
Christian Aguiar
You make a good case in this first paragraph for the importance of your topic.
Christian Aguiar
Wow, this is a shocking number. Be sure to include the source here, Jasmin, just like we discussed in class.
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Good use of the memo format, Jasmin
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
That’s okay, but the research itself would need to be real, so this information must come from an actual study that you cite.
MEMO 2
the school performances but also the mental ability of our students. They are constantly in a
subconscious state with themselves.
This memo is to call upon every staff to help our students overcome depression and
anxiety. This can be possible if we create more time to interact and offer a listening hear to them.
Through this, they will feel comfortable and will be able to speak out about the problems they face.
Thank you.
Christian Aguiar
I like the creativity here, Jasmin. For the memo assignment, though, you need to talk about your own plans for this class. Are you perhaps going to help your audience understand how to support students struggling with depression?
1
CollegeStudent’s Depression
Jasmin Linthicum
Course Discovery Writing
Professor Aguiar
Date Due 02/24/202
2
College Student’s Depression
2
According to the World Health Organization (WHO), depression is a common and severe
health issue that affects how someone feels, thinks and acts. The most common symptoms of
depression are; having bad moods and feeling very sad, losing interest in the activities that were
once fun, loss of appetite, which in turn will lead to massive weight loss or gain that is not related
to dieting and difficulty in concentrating, thinking or making decisions (LeMoult & Gotlib, 2019).
People become depressed due to various factors; some of the significant social factors that
bring about depression include; encountering traumatic events, separation from parents or
caregivers and being bullied. Personality some people are inclined towards experiencing
depression. For instance, people who tend to hold worries, have a low-self-esteem, are
perfectionists and are very sensitive towards negative criticism naturally have a higher likelihood
of facing depression.
Depression throughout history has always been a health problem for people. According to
articles written by philosophers and writers throughout humanity’s history, there is depression,
which is a health condition. The articles also include some of the continuous struggles that have
been made to find a solution on treating this condition. For instance, the ancient Greeks and
Romans had different thinking on depression. Some of the literature shows that the Greeks had a
notion that depression was a form of evil spirit possession and used exorcism techniques like;
beatings and starvation as “treatments” to cure a person. On the other hand, the Romans thought
depression was a combination of biological and psychological issues and employed gymnastics,
special diet, herbal medicine and music to treat the patients (Taquet et al., 2020).
In our present day, some of the startling statistics concerning depression are; depression
affects approximately one in fifteen adults, that is close to 6.8% annually, and a projection of an
estimated one in six persons will encounter depression at a given point in their life, that is around
Christian Aguiar
All of these statistics come from research, so you need to cite them using an in-text citation like we learned in class. Luckily, we’re reviewing them again today (3/17).
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
This is another place where you need to cite your source. Which literature tells us this?
Christian Aguiar
I like the historical context, Jasmin. This could be a great way to begin the script for your video, too.
Christian Aguiar
Since this is an argument based on research – it draws on what scientists know about depression – you need to make it clear what the source is.
Christian Aguiar
Do you mean “personally, some people are inclined…” or perhaps that “some people’s personalities are inclined”?
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Remember, the colon (:) introduces a list like this; the semicolon (;) connects two complete thoughts.
Christian Aguiar
Great context, Jasmin. For your reader to understand your topic, they will need to first understand what depression is. This is a strong opening move.
Christian Aguiar
3
16.7%. Studies show that females are more likely to experience depression compared to the men.
Clinicians have also found that depression is more likely to occur during the late teens to mid-20s.
This age group indicates that college students are the ones who are likely to suffer most from the
effect of depression.
Depression in college students has affected their social life adversely by lowering their
mood, feelings and self-esteem. It has also affected their school life by; making it challenging to
handle their schoolwork and losing interest in activities like sports. It has led to emotional
outbursts such as anger, faulty self-assessments, and lack of energy. Some of the statistics that
show the extent of this problem are; the overall rate of college students that have been reported to
have depression is about 45% (Moeller & Seehuus,
2019).
Suicide has become the third leading cause of death among college students; 76% of those
reported depression. Their first encounter was their mid-20, and nearly two-thirds of students who
developed substance abuse issues reported experiencing depression. These statistics indicate that
this is a significant health crisis among college students.
Another significant factor that makes this a significant issue is that close to 75% of the
students experiencing depression are reluctant to seek help and medication. This brings about an
additional risk of harmful outcomes like; dropping out of college, performing poorly academically,
the risk of substance abuse and a high chance of committing suicide in the event of a full
depression (Ramón-Arbués et al., 2020).
Depression among college students is a serious mental issue that affects in a big way how
the student thinks and behaves and can lead to significant emotional, functional and physical
issues. So it is crucial to understand the causes and effects of this issue among the students and
how it can be treated and even prevented.
Christian Aguiar
Same here, Jasmin. What does this evidence suggest about what might be lacking in colleges, or what college students need?
Christian Aguiar
Before continuing with more evidence, Jasmin, you should explain the significance of this evidence. Do college students need more help? More support?
Christian Aguiar
Can you find a study on how depression impacts schoolwork or activities?
Christian Aguiar
Can you find a scholarly study that explores WHY students might be reluctant to seek help? Are all students equally reluctant? Are there factors that influence them?
Christian Aguiar
I’ve underlined two sections that are both, in a sense, working thesis statements. I think this second one would work better, as it provides an argument you can develop step by step.
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Is this perhaps a continuation of the “some of the statistics” line above? If so, it needs to be in the same paragraph, Jasmin, otherwise your reader will get confused as I have here.
Christian Aguiar
Since there’s just one stat here, it would make more sense to present it directly.
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
This is a strong link between the background and the working thesis, which comes in the next paragraph.
Christian Aguiar
4
Some of the research approaches that can be employed to be able to identify depression in
college students include; getting help from the parents, this is by developing an approach of getting
to know from different parents on the well-being of the child, to be able to assess some of the most
common symptoms that could show depression. This is an essential aspect as it will be easier also
to train the parent on how to handle and provide support if the child is undergoing depression,
through; preparing the child for the unexpected, the importance of staying close, encouraging
healthy habits and developing a plan that is focused on student mental health (Park & Zarate Jr,
2019).
Another research method is designing a purpose design questionnaire that includes records
of sociodemographic data, such as; age, sex, year of study and performance in studies. The
questionnaire will consist of questions that will help measure the rate of depression among the
students. A number of colleges will be picked and select representatives to participate and increase
statistical power. To increase the accuracy of the research, it is essential to ensure that there is a
proportional stratified sampling of the colleges so that all the different age groups are represented.
Also, in the sampling process, the number of representatives to be obtained from each college will
be determined by calculations and proportional to size probability.
References
LeMoult, J., & Gotlib, I. H. (2019). Depression: A cognitive perspective. Clinical Psychology
Review, 69, 51-66.
Christian Aguiar
These aren’t quite research approaches, Jasmin – research approaches would be your lenses, like psychological or educational impacts. These are solutions you could propose.
5
Moeller, R. W., & Seehuus, M. (2019). Loneliness as a mediator for college students’ social skills
and experiences of depression and anxiety. Journal of adolescence, 73, 1-13.
Park, L. T., & Zarate Jr, C. A. (2019). Depression in the primary care setting. New England
Journal of Medicine, 380(6), 559-568.
Ramón-Arbués, E., Gea-Caballero, V., Granada-López, J. M., Juárez-Vela, R., Pellicer-García, B.,
& Antón-Solanas, I. (2020). The prevalence of depression, anxiety and stress and their
associated factors in college students. International Journal of Environmental Research and
Public Health, 17(19), 7001.
Taquet, M., Quoidbach, J., Gross, J. J., Saunders, K. E., & Goodwin, G. M. (2020). Mood
homeostasis, low mood, and history of depression in 2 large population samples. JAMA
Psychiatry, 77(9), 944-951.
Annotated Bibliography
By
Student
IGED210C Discovery Expository Writing
Date Submitted
Working Thesis Statement
Include your working thesis statement here. While not technically part of an annotated bibliography, keeping your thesis in mind while researching will make this process much more helpful.
Annotated Bibliography
Main Strand/Idea One: State the first main idea from your thesis.
Source One: APA-Style Reference
Source One: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Two: APA-Style Reference
Source Two: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Three: APA-Style Reference
Source Three: 1-paragraph annotation
Main Strand/Idea Two: State the second main idea from your thesis.
Source Four: APA-Style Reference
Source Four: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Five: APA-Style Reference
Source Five: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Six: APA-Style Reference
Source Six: 1-paragraph annotation
Main Strand/Idea Three: State the third main idea from your thesis.
Source Seven: APA-Style Reference
Source Seven: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Eight: APA-Style Reference
Source Eight: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Nine: APA-Style Reference
Source Nine: 1-paragraph annotation
Additional Main Strand/Ideas: Continue on if you have more strands. Keep in mind that you will only have time for 3-4 chunks or segments in your vidro
Source Ten: APA-style Reference
Source Ten: 1-paragraph annotation
Running head: MEMO 1
MEMO
Jasmin Linthicum
Professor Aguiar
Discovery Writing
02/23/2022
Title: College student depression
College student depression has been an issue that most of our students are fighting against
within themselves. Anxiety is among the top concerns amongst our college students and it is an
issue that needs urgent actions to be taken. I decided to talk about this problem because the school
realized that most students are recording absenteeism and low grades. It is important to address this
issue because Following research done, 40% of our students are in depression.the st
Anxiety, relationship troubles, lack of sleep, poor diets and eating habits, and a lack of
regular workouts are some of the major causes of student sadness, according to study conducted by
the management. These aren’t the sole causes of depression, therefore it’s critical to involve our
children in discussions that allow them to open up about their issues.
Having a high number of students suffering from depression is very disappointing. The
future of our nation depends on our students and being in our college it is our responsibility to help
them out. Most of the students have been having difficulty in concentration, their performances
have dropped, some will always look exhausted, and some have joined alcoholism. This is a result
of depression that the college students are going through. The impact of depression not only affects
Christian Aguiar
This paragraph repeats some of the earlier ideas; instead of repeating those ideas, this would be a good place to answer the third part of the prompt: What disciplinary lenses will you use?
Christian Aguiar
It can be a little confusing, but for a memo you would NOT indent the paragraphs – it’s business writing – but for your proposal you WILL.
Christian Aguiar
In your preliminary research for the proposal, these are the types of issues you will need to find research backing for.
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
I’m a little confused, Jasmin – who is the management? Are you imagining that this is a memo you’re writing at work?
Christian Aguiar
You make a good case in this first paragraph for the importance of your topic.
Christian Aguiar
Wow, this is a shocking number. Be sure to include the source here, Jasmin, just like we discussed in class.
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Good use of the memo format, Jasmin
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
That’s okay, but the research itself would need to be real, so this information must come from an actual study that you cite.
MEMO 2
the school performances but also the mental ability of our students. They are constantly in a
subconscious state with themselves.
This memo is to call upon every staff to help our students overcome depression and
anxiety. This can be possible if we create more time to interact and offer a listening hear to them.
Through this, they will feel comfortable and will be able to speak out about the problems they face.
Thank you.
Christian Aguiar
I like the creativity here, Jasmin. For the memo assignment, though, you need to talk about your own plans for this class. Are you perhaps going to help your audience understand how to support students struggling with depression?
1
CollegeStudent’s Depression
Jasmin Linthicum
Course Discovery Writing
Professor Aguiar
Date Due 02/24/202
2
College Student’s Depression
2
According to the World Health Organization (WHO), depression is a common and severe
health issue that affects how someone feels, thinks and acts. The most common symptoms of
depression are; having bad moods and feeling very sad, losing interest in the activities that were
once fun, loss of appetite, which in turn will lead to massive weight loss or gain that is not related
to dieting and difficulty in concentrating, thinking or making decisions (LeMoult & Gotlib, 2019).
People become depressed due to various factors; some of the significant social factors that
bring about depression include; encountering traumatic events, separation from parents or
caregivers and being bullied. Personality some people are inclined towards experiencing
depression. For instance, people who tend to hold worries, have a low-self-esteem, are
perfectionists and are very sensitive towards negative criticism naturally have a higher likelihood
of facing depression.
Depression throughout history has always been a health problem for people. According to
articles written by philosophers and writers throughout humanity’s history, there is depression,
which is a health condition. The articles also include some of the continuous struggles that have
been made to find a solution on treating this condition. For instance, the ancient Greeks and
Romans had different thinking on depression. Some of the literature shows that the Greeks had a
notion that depression was a form of evil spirit possession and used exorcism techniques like;
beatings and starvation as “treatments” to cure a person. On the other hand, the Romans thought
depression was a combination of biological and psychological issues and employed gymnastics,
special diet, herbal medicine and music to treat the patients (Taquet et al., 2020).
In our present day, some of the startling statistics concerning depression are; depression
affects approximately one in fifteen adults, that is close to 6.8% annually, and a projection of an
estimated one in six persons will encounter depression at a given point in their life, that is around
Christian Aguiar
All of these statistics come from research, so you need to cite them using an in-text citation like we learned in class. Luckily, we’re reviewing them again today (3/17).
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
This is another place where you need to cite your source. Which literature tells us this?
Christian Aguiar
I like the historical context, Jasmin. This could be a great way to begin the script for your video, too.
Christian Aguiar
Since this is an argument based on research – it draws on what scientists know about depression – you need to make it clear what the source is.
Christian Aguiar
Do you mean “personally, some people are inclined…” or perhaps that “some people’s personalities are inclined”?
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Remember, the colon (:) introduces a list like this; the semicolon (;) connects two complete thoughts.
Christian Aguiar
Great context, Jasmin. For your reader to understand your topic, they will need to first understand what depression is. This is a strong opening move.
Christian Aguiar
3
16.7%. Studies show that females are more likely to experience depression compared to the men.
Clinicians have also found that depression is more likely to occur during the late teens to mid-20s.
This age group indicates that college students are the ones who are likely to suffer most from the
effect of depression.
Depression in college students has affected their social life adversely by lowering their
mood, feelings and self-esteem. It has also affected their school life by; making it challenging to
handle their schoolwork and losing interest in activities like sports. It has led to emotional
outbursts such as anger, faulty self-assessments, and lack of energy. Some of the statistics that
show the extent of this problem are; the overall rate of college students that have been reported to
have depression is about 45% (Moeller & Seehuus,
2019).
Suicide has become the third leading cause of death among college students; 76% of those
reported depression. Their first encounter was their mid-20, and nearly two-thirds of students who
developed substance abuse issues reported experiencing depression. These statistics indicate that
this is a significant health crisis among college students.
Another significant factor that makes this a significant issue is that close to 75% of the
students experiencing depression are reluctant to seek help and medication. This brings about an
additional risk of harmful outcomes like; dropping out of college, performing poorly academically,
the risk of substance abuse and a high chance of committing suicide in the event of a full
depression (Ramón-Arbués et al., 2020).
Depression among college students is a serious mental issue that affects in a big way how
the student thinks and behaves and can lead to significant emotional, functional and physical
issues. So it is crucial to understand the causes and effects of this issue among the students and
how it can be treated and even prevented.
Christian Aguiar
Same here, Jasmin. What does this evidence suggest about what might be lacking in colleges, or what college students need?
Christian Aguiar
Before continuing with more evidence, Jasmin, you should explain the significance of this evidence. Do college students need more help? More support?
Christian Aguiar
Can you find a study on how depression impacts schoolwork or activities?
Christian Aguiar
Can you find a scholarly study that explores WHY students might be reluctant to seek help? Are all students equally reluctant? Are there factors that influence them?
Christian Aguiar
I’ve underlined two sections that are both, in a sense, working thesis statements. I think this second one would work better, as it provides an argument you can develop step by step.
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Is this perhaps a continuation of the “some of the statistics” line above? If so, it needs to be in the same paragraph, Jasmin, otherwise your reader will get confused as I have here.
Christian Aguiar
Since there’s just one stat here, it would make more sense to present it directly.
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
This is a strong link between the background and the working thesis, which comes in the next paragraph.
Christian Aguiar
4
Some of the research approaches that can be employed to be able to identify depression in
college students include; getting help from the parents, this is by developing an approach of getting
to know from different parents on the well-being of the child, to be able to assess some of the most
common symptoms that could show depression. This is an essential aspect as it will be easier also
to train the parent on how to handle and provide support if the child is undergoing depression,
through; preparing the child for the unexpected, the importance of staying close, encouraging
healthy habits and developing a plan that is focused on student mental health (Park & Zarate Jr,
2019).
Another research method is designing a purpose design questionnaire that includes records
of sociodemographic data, such as; age, sex, year of study and performance in studies. The
questionnaire will consist of questions that will help measure the rate of depression among the
students. A number of colleges will be picked and select representatives to participate and increase
statistical power. To increase the accuracy of the research, it is essential to ensure that there is a
proportional stratified sampling of the colleges so that all the different age groups are represented.
Also, in the sampling process, the number of representatives to be obtained from each college will
be determined by calculations and proportional to size probability.
References
LeMoult, J., & Gotlib, I. H. (2019). Depression: A cognitive perspective. Clinical Psychology
Review, 69, 51-66.
Christian Aguiar
These aren’t quite research approaches, Jasmin – research approaches would be your lenses, like psychological or educational impacts. These are solutions you could propose.
5
Moeller, R. W., & Seehuus, M. (2019). Loneliness as a mediator for college students’ social skills
and experiences of depression and anxiety. Journal of adolescence, 73, 1-13.
Park, L. T., & Zarate Jr, C. A. (2019). Depression in the primary care setting. New England
Journal of Medicine, 380(6), 559-568.
Ramón-Arbués, E., Gea-Caballero, V., Granada-López, J. M., Juárez-Vela, R., Pellicer-García, B.,
& Antón-Solanas, I. (2020). The prevalence of depression, anxiety and stress and their
associated factors in college students. International Journal of Environmental Research and
Public Health, 17(19), 7001.
Taquet, M., Quoidbach, J., Gross, J. J., Saunders, K. E., & Goodwin, G. M. (2020). Mood
homeostasis, low mood, and history of depression in 2 large population samples. JAMA
Psychiatry, 77(9), 944-951.
Annotated Bibliography
By
Student
IGED210C Discovery Expository Writing
Date Submitted
Working Thesis Statement
Include your working thesis statement here. While not technically part of an annotated bibliography, keeping your thesis in mind while researching will make this process much more helpful.
Annotated Bibliography
Main Strand/Idea One: State the first main idea from your thesis.
Source One: APA-Style Reference
Source One: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Two: APA-Style Reference
Source Two: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Three: APA-Style Reference
Source Three: 1-paragraph annotation
Main Strand/Idea Two: State the second main idea from your thesis.
Source Four: APA-Style Reference
Source Four: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Five: APA-Style Reference
Source Five: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Six: APA-Style Reference
Source Six: 1-paragraph annotation
Main Strand/Idea Three: State the third main idea from your thesis.
Source Seven: APA-Style Reference
Source Seven: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Eight: APA-Style Reference
Source Eight: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Nine: APA-Style Reference
Source Nine: 1-paragraph annotation
Additional Main Strand/Ideas: Continue on if you have more strands. Keep in mind that you will only have time for 3-4 chunks or segments in your vidro
Source Ten: APA-style Reference
Source Ten: 1-paragraph annotation
Running head: MEMO 1
MEMO
Jasmin Linthicum
Professor Aguiar
Discovery Writing
02/23/2022
Title: College student depression
College student depression has been an issue that most of our students are fighting against
within themselves. Anxiety is among the top concerns amongst our college students and it is an
issue that needs urgent actions to be taken. I decided to talk about this problem because the school
realized that most students are recording absenteeism and low grades. It is important to address this
issue because Following research done, 40% of our students are in depression.the st
Anxiety, relationship troubles, lack of sleep, poor diets and eating habits, and a lack of
regular workouts are some of the major causes of student sadness, according to study conducted by
the management. These aren’t the sole causes of depression, therefore it’s critical to involve our
children in discussions that allow them to open up about their issues.
Having a high number of students suffering from depression is very disappointing. The
future of our nation depends on our students and being in our college it is our responsibility to help
them out. Most of the students have been having difficulty in concentration, their performances
have dropped, some will always look exhausted, and some have joined alcoholism. This is a result
of depression that the college students are going through. The impact of depression not only affects
Christian Aguiar
This paragraph repeats some of the earlier ideas; instead of repeating those ideas, this would be a good place to answer the third part of the prompt: What disciplinary lenses will you use?
Christian Aguiar
It can be a little confusing, but for a memo you would NOT indent the paragraphs – it’s business writing – but for your proposal you WILL.
Christian Aguiar
In your preliminary research for the proposal, these are the types of issues you will need to find research backing for.
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
I’m a little confused, Jasmin – who is the management? Are you imagining that this is a memo you’re writing at work?
Christian Aguiar
You make a good case in this first paragraph for the importance of your topic.
Christian Aguiar
Wow, this is a shocking number. Be sure to include the source here, Jasmin, just like we discussed in class.
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Good use of the memo format, Jasmin
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
That’s okay, but the research itself would need to be real, so this information must come from an actual study that you cite.
MEMO 2
the school performances but also the mental ability of our students. They are constantly in a
subconscious state with themselves.
This memo is to call upon every staff to help our students overcome depression and
anxiety. This can be possible if we create more time to interact and offer a listening hear to them.
Through this, they will feel comfortable and will be able to speak out about the problems they face.
Thank you.
Christian Aguiar
I like the creativity here, Jasmin. For the memo assignment, though, you need to talk about your own plans for this class. Are you perhaps going to help your audience understand how to support students struggling with depression?
1
CollegeStudent’s Depression
Jasmin Linthicum
Course Discovery Writing
Professor Aguiar
Date Due 02/24/202
2
College Student’s Depression
2
According to the World Health Organization (WHO), depression is a common and severe
health issue that affects how someone feels, thinks and acts. The most common symptoms of
depression are; having bad moods and feeling very sad, losing interest in the activities that were
once fun, loss of appetite, which in turn will lead to massive weight loss or gain that is not related
to dieting and difficulty in concentrating, thinking or making decisions (LeMoult & Gotlib, 2019).
People become depressed due to various factors; some of the significant social factors that
bring about depression include; encountering traumatic events, separation from parents or
caregivers and being bullied. Personality some people are inclined towards experiencing
depression. For instance, people who tend to hold worries, have a low-self-esteem, are
perfectionists and are very sensitive towards negative criticism naturally have a higher likelihood
of facing depression.
Depression throughout history has always been a health problem for people. According to
articles written by philosophers and writers throughout humanity’s history, there is depression,
which is a health condition. The articles also include some of the continuous struggles that have
been made to find a solution on treating this condition. For instance, the ancient Greeks and
Romans had different thinking on depression. Some of the literature shows that the Greeks had a
notion that depression was a form of evil spirit possession and used exorcism techniques like;
beatings and starvation as “treatments” to cure a person. On the other hand, the Romans thought
depression was a combination of biological and psychological issues and employed gymnastics,
special diet, herbal medicine and music to treat the patients (Taquet et al., 2020).
In our present day, some of the startling statistics concerning depression are; depression
affects approximately one in fifteen adults, that is close to 6.8% annually, and a projection of an
estimated one in six persons will encounter depression at a given point in their life, that is around
Christian Aguiar
All of these statistics come from research, so you need to cite them using an in-text citation like we learned in class. Luckily, we’re reviewing them again today (3/17).
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
This is another place where you need to cite your source. Which literature tells us this?
Christian Aguiar
I like the historical context, Jasmin. This could be a great way to begin the script for your video, too.
Christian Aguiar
Since this is an argument based on research – it draws on what scientists know about depression – you need to make it clear what the source is.
Christian Aguiar
Do you mean “personally, some people are inclined…” or perhaps that “some people’s personalities are inclined”?
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Remember, the colon (:) introduces a list like this; the semicolon (;) connects two complete thoughts.
Christian Aguiar
Great context, Jasmin. For your reader to understand your topic, they will need to first understand what depression is. This is a strong opening move.
Christian Aguiar
3
16.7%. Studies show that females are more likely to experience depression compared to the men.
Clinicians have also found that depression is more likely to occur during the late teens to mid-20s.
This age group indicates that college students are the ones who are likely to suffer most from the
effect of depression.
Depression in college students has affected their social life adversely by lowering their
mood, feelings and self-esteem. It has also affected their school life by; making it challenging to
handle their schoolwork and losing interest in activities like sports. It has led to emotional
outbursts such as anger, faulty self-assessments, and lack of energy. Some of the statistics that
show the extent of this problem are; the overall rate of college students that have been reported to
have depression is about 45% (Moeller & Seehuus,
2019).
Suicide has become the third leading cause of death among college students; 76% of those
reported depression. Their first encounter was their mid-20, and nearly two-thirds of students who
developed substance abuse issues reported experiencing depression. These statistics indicate that
this is a significant health crisis among college students.
Another significant factor that makes this a significant issue is that close to 75% of the
students experiencing depression are reluctant to seek help and medication. This brings about an
additional risk of harmful outcomes like; dropping out of college, performing poorly academically,
the risk of substance abuse and a high chance of committing suicide in the event of a full
depression (Ramón-Arbués et al., 2020).
Depression among college students is a serious mental issue that affects in a big way how
the student thinks and behaves and can lead to significant emotional, functional and physical
issues. So it is crucial to understand the causes and effects of this issue among the students and
how it can be treated and even prevented.
Christian Aguiar
Same here, Jasmin. What does this evidence suggest about what might be lacking in colleges, or what college students need?
Christian Aguiar
Before continuing with more evidence, Jasmin, you should explain the significance of this evidence. Do college students need more help? More support?
Christian Aguiar
Can you find a study on how depression impacts schoolwork or activities?
Christian Aguiar
Can you find a scholarly study that explores WHY students might be reluctant to seek help? Are all students equally reluctant? Are there factors that influence them?
Christian Aguiar
I’ve underlined two sections that are both, in a sense, working thesis statements. I think this second one would work better, as it provides an argument you can develop step by step.
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Is this perhaps a continuation of the “some of the statistics” line above? If so, it needs to be in the same paragraph, Jasmin, otherwise your reader will get confused as I have here.
Christian Aguiar
Since there’s just one stat here, it would make more sense to present it directly.
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
This is a strong link between the background and the working thesis, which comes in the next paragraph.
Christian Aguiar
4
Some of the research approaches that can be employed to be able to identify depression in
college students include; getting help from the parents, this is by developing an approach of getting
to know from different parents on the well-being of the child, to be able to assess some of the most
common symptoms that could show depression. This is an essential aspect as it will be easier also
to train the parent on how to handle and provide support if the child is undergoing depression,
through; preparing the child for the unexpected, the importance of staying close, encouraging
healthy habits and developing a plan that is focused on student mental health (Park & Zarate Jr,
2019).
Another research method is designing a purpose design questionnaire that includes records
of sociodemographic data, such as; age, sex, year of study and performance in studies. The
questionnaire will consist of questions that will help measure the rate of depression among the
students. A number of colleges will be picked and select representatives to participate and increase
statistical power. To increase the accuracy of the research, it is essential to ensure that there is a
proportional stratified sampling of the colleges so that all the different age groups are represented.
Also, in the sampling process, the number of representatives to be obtained from each college will
be determined by calculations and proportional to size probability.
References
LeMoult, J., & Gotlib, I. H. (2019). Depression: A cognitive perspective. Clinical Psychology
Review, 69, 51-66.
Christian Aguiar
These aren’t quite research approaches, Jasmin – research approaches would be your lenses, like psychological or educational impacts. These are solutions you could propose.
5
Moeller, R. W., & Seehuus, M. (2019). Loneliness as a mediator for college students’ social skills
and experiences of depression and anxiety. Journal of adolescence, 73, 1-13.
Park, L. T., & Zarate Jr, C. A. (2019). Depression in the primary care setting. New England
Journal of Medicine, 380(6), 559-568.
Ramón-Arbués, E., Gea-Caballero, V., Granada-López, J. M., Juárez-Vela, R., Pellicer-García, B.,
& Antón-Solanas, I. (2020). The prevalence of depression, anxiety and stress and their
associated factors in college students. International Journal of Environmental Research and
Public Health, 17(19), 7001.
Taquet, M., Quoidbach, J., Gross, J. J., Saunders, K. E., & Goodwin, G. M. (2020). Mood
homeostasis, low mood, and history of depression in 2 large population samples. JAMA
Psychiatry, 77(9), 944-951.
Annotated Bibliography
By
Student
IGED210C Discovery Expository Writing
Date Submitted
Working Thesis Statement
Include your working thesis statement here. While not technically part of an annotated bibliography, keeping your thesis in mind while researching will make this process much more helpful.
Annotated Bibliography
Main Strand/Idea One: State the first main idea from your thesis.
Source One: APA-Style Reference
Source One: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Two: APA-Style Reference
Source Two: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Three: APA-Style Reference
Source Three: 1-paragraph annotation
Main Strand/Idea Two: State the second main idea from your thesis.
Source Four: APA-Style Reference
Source Four: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Five: APA-Style Reference
Source Five: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Six: APA-Style Reference
Source Six: 1-paragraph annotation
Main Strand/Idea Three: State the third main idea from your thesis.
Source Seven: APA-Style Reference
Source Seven: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Eight: APA-Style Reference
Source Eight: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Nine: APA-Style Reference
Source Nine: 1-paragraph annotation
Additional Main Strand/Ideas: Continue on if you have more strands. Keep in mind that you will only have time for 3-4 chunks or segments in your vidro
Source Ten: APA-style Reference
Source Ten: 1-paragraph annotation
Running head: MEMO 1
MEMO
Jasmin Linthicum
Professor Aguiar
Discovery Writing
02/23/2022
Title: College student depression
College student depression has been an issue that most of our students are fighting against
within themselves. Anxiety is among the top concerns amongst our college students and it is an
issue that needs urgent actions to be taken. I decided to talk about this problem because the school
realized that most students are recording absenteeism and low grades. It is important to address this
issue because Following research done, 40% of our students are in depression.the st
Anxiety, relationship troubles, lack of sleep, poor diets and eating habits, and a lack of
regular workouts are some of the major causes of student sadness, according to study conducted by
the management. These aren’t the sole causes of depression, therefore it’s critical to involve our
children in discussions that allow them to open up about their issues.
Having a high number of students suffering from depression is very disappointing. The
future of our nation depends on our students and being in our college it is our responsibility to help
them out. Most of the students have been having difficulty in concentration, their performances
have dropped, some will always look exhausted, and some have joined alcoholism. This is a result
of depression that the college students are going through. The impact of depression not only affects
Christian Aguiar
This paragraph repeats some of the earlier ideas; instead of repeating those ideas, this would be a good place to answer the third part of the prompt: What disciplinary lenses will you use?
Christian Aguiar
It can be a little confusing, but for a memo you would NOT indent the paragraphs – it’s business writing – but for your proposal you WILL.
Christian Aguiar
In your preliminary research for the proposal, these are the types of issues you will need to find research backing for.
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
I’m a little confused, Jasmin – who is the management? Are you imagining that this is a memo you’re writing at work?
Christian Aguiar
You make a good case in this first paragraph for the importance of your topic.
Christian Aguiar
Wow, this is a shocking number. Be sure to include the source here, Jasmin, just like we discussed in class.
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Good use of the memo format, Jasmin
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
That’s okay, but the research itself would need to be real, so this information must come from an actual study that you cite.
MEMO 2
the school performances but also the mental ability of our students. They are constantly in a
subconscious state with themselves.
This memo is to call upon every staff to help our students overcome depression and
anxiety. This can be possible if we create more time to interact and offer a listening hear to them.
Through this, they will feel comfortable and will be able to speak out about the problems they face.
Thank you.
Christian Aguiar
I like the creativity here, Jasmin. For the memo assignment, though, you need to talk about your own plans for this class. Are you perhaps going to help your audience understand how to support students struggling with depression?
1
CollegeStudent’s Depression
Jasmin Linthicum
Course Discovery Writing
Professor Aguiar
Date Due 02/24/202
2
College Student’s Depression
2
According to the World Health Organization (WHO), depression is a common and severe
health issue that affects how someone feels, thinks and acts. The most common symptoms of
depression are; having bad moods and feeling very sad, losing interest in the activities that were
once fun, loss of appetite, which in turn will lead to massive weight loss or gain that is not related
to dieting and difficulty in concentrating, thinking or making decisions (LeMoult & Gotlib, 2019).
People become depressed due to various factors; some of the significant social factors that
bring about depression include; encountering traumatic events, separation from parents or
caregivers and being bullied. Personality some people are inclined towards experiencing
depression. For instance, people who tend to hold worries, have a low-self-esteem, are
perfectionists and are very sensitive towards negative criticism naturally have a higher likelihood
of facing depression.
Depression throughout history has always been a health problem for people. According to
articles written by philosophers and writers throughout humanity’s history, there is depression,
which is a health condition. The articles also include some of the continuous struggles that have
been made to find a solution on treating this condition. For instance, the ancient Greeks and
Romans had different thinking on depression. Some of the literature shows that the Greeks had a
notion that depression was a form of evil spirit possession and used exorcism techniques like;
beatings and starvation as “treatments” to cure a person. On the other hand, the Romans thought
depression was a combination of biological and psychological issues and employed gymnastics,
special diet, herbal medicine and music to treat the patients (Taquet et al., 2020).
In our present day, some of the startling statistics concerning depression are; depression
affects approximately one in fifteen adults, that is close to 6.8% annually, and a projection of an
estimated one in six persons will encounter depression at a given point in their life, that is around
Christian Aguiar
All of these statistics come from research, so you need to cite them using an in-text citation like we learned in class. Luckily, we’re reviewing them again today (3/17).
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
This is another place where you need to cite your source. Which literature tells us this?
Christian Aguiar
I like the historical context, Jasmin. This could be a great way to begin the script for your video, too.
Christian Aguiar
Since this is an argument based on research – it draws on what scientists know about depression – you need to make it clear what the source is.
Christian Aguiar
Do you mean “personally, some people are inclined…” or perhaps that “some people’s personalities are inclined”?
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Remember, the colon (:) introduces a list like this; the semicolon (;) connects two complete thoughts.
Christian Aguiar
Great context, Jasmin. For your reader to understand your topic, they will need to first understand what depression is. This is a strong opening move.
Christian Aguiar
3
16.7%. Studies show that females are more likely to experience depression compared to the men.
Clinicians have also found that depression is more likely to occur during the late teens to mid-20s.
This age group indicates that college students are the ones who are likely to suffer most from the
effect of depression.
Depression in college students has affected their social life adversely by lowering their
mood, feelings and self-esteem. It has also affected their school life by; making it challenging to
handle their schoolwork and losing interest in activities like sports. It has led to emotional
outbursts such as anger, faulty self-assessments, and lack of energy. Some of the statistics that
show the extent of this problem are; the overall rate of college students that have been reported to
have depression is about 45% (Moeller & Seehuus,
2019).
Suicide has become the third leading cause of death among college students; 76% of those
reported depression. Their first encounter was their mid-20, and nearly two-thirds of students who
developed substance abuse issues reported experiencing depression. These statistics indicate that
this is a significant health crisis among college students.
Another significant factor that makes this a significant issue is that close to 75% of the
students experiencing depression are reluctant to seek help and medication. This brings about an
additional risk of harmful outcomes like; dropping out of college, performing poorly academically,
the risk of substance abuse and a high chance of committing suicide in the event of a full
depression (Ramón-Arbués et al., 2020).
Depression among college students is a serious mental issue that affects in a big way how
the student thinks and behaves and can lead to significant emotional, functional and physical
issues. So it is crucial to understand the causes and effects of this issue among the students and
how it can be treated and even prevented.
Christian Aguiar
Same here, Jasmin. What does this evidence suggest about what might be lacking in colleges, or what college students need?
Christian Aguiar
Before continuing with more evidence, Jasmin, you should explain the significance of this evidence. Do college students need more help? More support?
Christian Aguiar
Can you find a study on how depression impacts schoolwork or activities?
Christian Aguiar
Can you find a scholarly study that explores WHY students might be reluctant to seek help? Are all students equally reluctant? Are there factors that influence them?
Christian Aguiar
I’ve underlined two sections that are both, in a sense, working thesis statements. I think this second one would work better, as it provides an argument you can develop step by step.
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Is this perhaps a continuation of the “some of the statistics” line above? If so, it needs to be in the same paragraph, Jasmin, otherwise your reader will get confused as I have here.
Christian Aguiar
Since there’s just one stat here, it would make more sense to present it directly.
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
This is a strong link between the background and the working thesis, which comes in the next paragraph.
Christian Aguiar
4
Some of the research approaches that can be employed to be able to identify depression in
college students include; getting help from the parents, this is by developing an approach of getting
to know from different parents on the well-being of the child, to be able to assess some of the most
common symptoms that could show depression. This is an essential aspect as it will be easier also
to train the parent on how to handle and provide support if the child is undergoing depression,
through; preparing the child for the unexpected, the importance of staying close, encouraging
healthy habits and developing a plan that is focused on student mental health (Park & Zarate Jr,
2019).
Another research method is designing a purpose design questionnaire that includes records
of sociodemographic data, such as; age, sex, year of study and performance in studies. The
questionnaire will consist of questions that will help measure the rate of depression among the
students. A number of colleges will be picked and select representatives to participate and increase
statistical power. To increase the accuracy of the research, it is essential to ensure that there is a
proportional stratified sampling of the colleges so that all the different age groups are represented.
Also, in the sampling process, the number of representatives to be obtained from each college will
be determined by calculations and proportional to size probability.
References
LeMoult, J., & Gotlib, I. H. (2019). Depression: A cognitive perspective. Clinical Psychology
Review, 69, 51-66.
Christian Aguiar
These aren’t quite research approaches, Jasmin – research approaches would be your lenses, like psychological or educational impacts. These are solutions you could propose.
5
Moeller, R. W., & Seehuus, M. (2019). Loneliness as a mediator for college students’ social skills
and experiences of depression and anxiety. Journal of adolescence, 73, 1-13.
Park, L. T., & Zarate Jr, C. A. (2019). Depression in the primary care setting. New England
Journal of Medicine, 380(6), 559-568.
Ramón-Arbués, E., Gea-Caballero, V., Granada-López, J. M., Juárez-Vela, R., Pellicer-García, B.,
& Antón-Solanas, I. (2020). The prevalence of depression, anxiety and stress and their
associated factors in college students. International Journal of Environmental Research and
Public Health, 17(19), 7001.
Taquet, M., Quoidbach, J., Gross, J. J., Saunders, K. E., & Goodwin, G. M. (2020). Mood
homeostasis, low mood, and history of depression in 2 large population samples. JAMA
Psychiatry, 77(9), 944-951.
Annotated Bibliography
By
Student
IGED210C Discovery Expository Writing
Date Submitted
Working Thesis Statement
Include your working thesis statement here. While not technically part of an annotated bibliography, keeping your thesis in mind while researching will make this process much more helpful.
Annotated Bibliography
Main Strand/Idea One: State the first main idea from your thesis.
Source One: APA-Style Reference
Source One: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Two: APA-Style Reference
Source Two: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Three: APA-Style Reference
Source Three: 1-paragraph annotation
Main Strand/Idea Two: State the second main idea from your thesis.
Source Four: APA-Style Reference
Source Four: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Five: APA-Style Reference
Source Five: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Six: APA-Style Reference
Source Six: 1-paragraph annotation
Main Strand/Idea Three: State the third main idea from your thesis.
Source Seven: APA-Style Reference
Source Seven: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Eight: APA-Style Reference
Source Eight: 1-paragraph annotation
Source Nine: APA-Style Reference
Source Nine: 1-paragraph annotation
Additional Main Strand/Ideas: Continue on if you have more strands. Keep in mind that you will only have time for 3-4 chunks or segments in your vidro
Source Ten: APA-style Reference
Source Ten: 1-paragraph annotation
Running head: MEMO 1
MEMO
Jasmin Linthicum
Professor Aguiar
Discovery Writing
02/23/2022
Title: College student depression
College student depression has been an issue that most of our students are fighting against
within themselves. Anxiety is among the top concerns amongst our college students and it is an
issue that needs urgent actions to be taken. I decided to talk about this problem because the school
realized that most students are recording absenteeism and low grades. It is important to address this
issue because Following research done, 40% of our students are in depression.the st
Anxiety, relationship troubles, lack of sleep, poor diets and eating habits, and a lack of
regular workouts are some of the major causes of student sadness, according to study conducted by
the management. These aren’t the sole causes of depression, therefore it’s critical to involve our
children in discussions that allow them to open up about their issues.
Having a high number of students suffering from depression is very disappointing. The
future of our nation depends on our students and being in our college it is our responsibility to help
them out. Most of the students have been having difficulty in concentration, their performances
have dropped, some will always look exhausted, and some have joined alcoholism. This is a result
of depression that the college students are going through. The impact of depression not only affects
Christian Aguiar
This paragraph repeats some of the earlier ideas; instead of repeating those ideas, this would be a good place to answer the third part of the prompt: What disciplinary lenses will you use?
Christian Aguiar
It can be a little confusing, but for a memo you would NOT indent the paragraphs – it’s business writing – but for your proposal you WILL.
Christian Aguiar
In your preliminary research for the proposal, these are the types of issues you will need to find research backing for.
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
I’m a little confused, Jasmin – who is the management? Are you imagining that this is a memo you’re writing at work?
Christian Aguiar
You make a good case in this first paragraph for the importance of your topic.
Christian Aguiar
Wow, this is a shocking number. Be sure to include the source here, Jasmin, just like we discussed in class.
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Good use of the memo format, Jasmin
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
That’s okay, but the research itself would need to be real, so this information must come from an actual study that you cite.
MEMO 2
the school performances but also the mental ability of our students. They are constantly in a
subconscious state with themselves.
This memo is to call upon every staff to help our students overcome depression and
anxiety. This can be possible if we create more time to interact and offer a listening hear to them.
Through this, they will feel comfortable and will be able to speak out about the problems they face.
Thank you.
Christian Aguiar
I like the creativity here, Jasmin. For the memo assignment, though, you need to talk about your own plans for this class. Are you perhaps going to help your audience understand how to support students struggling with depression?
1
CollegeStudent’s Depression
Jasmin Linthicum
Course Discovery Writing
Professor Aguiar
Date Due 02/24/202
2
College Student’s Depression
2
According to the World Health Organization (WHO), depression is a common and severe
health issue that affects how someone feels, thinks and acts. The most common symptoms of
depression are; having bad moods and feeling very sad, losing interest in the activities that were
once fun, loss of appetite, which in turn will lead to massive weight loss or gain that is not related
to dieting and difficulty in concentrating, thinking or making decisions (LeMoult & Gotlib, 2019).
People become depressed due to various factors; some of the significant social factors that
bring about depression include; encountering traumatic events, separation from parents or
caregivers and being bullied. Personality some people are inclined towards experiencing
depression. For instance, people who tend to hold worries, have a low-self-esteem, are
perfectionists and are very sensitive towards negative criticism naturally have a higher likelihood
of facing depression.
Depression throughout history has always been a health problem for people. According to
articles written by philosophers and writers throughout humanity’s history, there is depression,
which is a health condition. The articles also include some of the continuous struggles that have
been made to find a solution on treating this condition. For instance, the ancient Greeks and
Romans had different thinking on depression. Some of the literature shows that the Greeks had a
notion that depression was a form of evil spirit possession and used exorcism techniques like;
beatings and starvation as “treatments” to cure a person. On the other hand, the Romans thought
depression was a combination of biological and psychological issues and employed gymnastics,
special diet, herbal medicine and music to treat the patients (Taquet et al., 2020).
In our present day, some of the startling statistics concerning depression are; depression
affects approximately one in fifteen adults, that is close to 6.8% annually, and a projection of an
estimated one in six persons will encounter depression at a given point in their life, that is around
Christian Aguiar
All of these statistics come from research, so you need to cite them using an in-text citation like we learned in class. Luckily, we’re reviewing them again today (3/17).
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
This is another place where you need to cite your source. Which literature tells us this?
Christian Aguiar
I like the historical context, Jasmin. This could be a great way to begin the script for your video, too.
Christian Aguiar
Since this is an argument based on research – it draws on what scientists know about depression – you need to make it clear what the source is.
Christian Aguiar
Do you mean “personally, some people are inclined…” or perhaps that “some people’s personalities are inclined”?
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Remember, the colon (:) introduces a list like this; the semicolon (;) connects two complete thoughts.
Christian Aguiar
Great context, Jasmin. For your reader to understand your topic, they will need to first understand what depression is. This is a strong opening move.
Christian Aguiar
3
16.7%. Studies show that females are more likely to experience depression compared to the men.
Clinicians have also found that depression is more likely to occur during the late teens to mid-20s.
This age group indicates that college students are the ones who are likely to suffer most from the
effect of depression.
Depression in college students has affected their social life adversely by lowering their
mood, feelings and self-esteem. It has also affected their school life by; making it challenging to
handle their schoolwork and losing interest in activities like sports. It has led to emotional
outbursts such as anger, faulty self-assessments, and lack of energy. Some of the statistics that
show the extent of this problem are; the overall rate of college students that have been reported to
have depression is about 45% (Moeller & Seehuus,
2019).
Suicide has become the third leading cause of death among college students; 76% of those
reported depression. Their first encounter was their mid-20, and nearly two-thirds of students who
developed substance abuse issues reported experiencing depression. These statistics indicate that
this is a significant health crisis among college students.
Another significant factor that makes this a significant issue is that close to 75% of the
students experiencing depression are reluctant to seek help and medication. This brings about an
additional risk of harmful outcomes like; dropping out of college, performing poorly academically,
the risk of substance abuse and a high chance of committing suicide in the event of a full
depression (Ramón-Arbués et al., 2020).
Depression among college students is a serious mental issue that affects in a big way how
the student thinks and behaves and can lead to significant emotional, functional and physical
issues. So it is crucial to understand the causes and effects of this issue among the students and
how it can be treated and even prevented.
Christian Aguiar
Same here, Jasmin. What does this evidence suggest about what might be lacking in colleges, or what college students need?
Christian Aguiar
Before continuing with more evidence, Jasmin, you should explain the significance of this evidence. Do college students need more help? More support?
Christian Aguiar
Can you find a study on how depression impacts schoolwork or activities?
Christian Aguiar
Can you find a scholarly study that explores WHY students might be reluctant to seek help? Are all students equally reluctant? Are there factors that influence them?
Christian Aguiar
I’ve underlined two sections that are both, in a sense, working thesis statements. I think this second one would work better, as it provides an argument you can develop step by step.
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Is this perhaps a continuation of the “some of the statistics” line above? If so, it needs to be in the same paragraph, Jasmin, otherwise your reader will get confused as I have here.
Christian Aguiar
Since there’s just one stat here, it would make more sense to present it directly.
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
Christian Aguiar
This is a strong link between the background and the working thesis, which comes in the next paragraph.
Christian Aguiar
4
Some of the research approaches that can be employed to be able to identify depression in
college students include; getting help from the parents, this is by developing an approach of getting
to know from different parents on the well-being of the child, to be able to assess some of the most
common symptoms that could show depression. This is an essential aspect as it will be easier also
to train the parent on how to handle and provide support if the child is undergoing depression,
through; preparing the child for the unexpected, the importance of staying close, encouraging
healthy habits and developing a plan that is focused on student mental health (Park & Zarate Jr,
2019).
Another research method is designing a purpose design questionnaire that includes records
of sociodemographic data, such as; age, sex, year of study and performance in studies. The
questionnaire will consist of questions that will help measure the rate of depression among the
students. A number of colleges will be picked and select representatives to participate and increase
statistical power. To increase the accuracy of the research, it is essential to ensure that there is a
proportional stratified sampling of the colleges so that all the different age groups are represented.
Also, in the sampling process, the number of representatives to be obtained from each college will
be determined by calculations and proportional to size probability.
References
LeMoult, J., & Gotlib, I. H. (2019). Depression: A cognitive perspective. Clinical Psychology
Review, 69, 51-66.
Christian Aguiar
These aren’t quite research approaches, Jasmin – research approaches would be your lenses, like psychological or educational impacts. These are solutions you could propose.
5
Moeller, R. W., & Seehuus, M. (2019). Loneliness as a mediator for college students’ social skills
and experiences of depression and anxiety. Journal of adolescence, 73, 1-13.
Park, L. T., & Zarate Jr, C. A. (2019). Depression in the primary care setting. New England
Journal of Medicine, 380(6), 559-568.
Ramón-Arbués, E., Gea-Caballero, V., Granada-López, J. M., Juárez-Vela, R., Pellicer-García, B.,
& Antón-Solanas, I. (2020). The prevalence of depression, anxiety and stress and their
associated factors in college students. International Journal of Environmental Research and
Public Health, 17(19), 7001.
Taquet, M., Quoidbach, J., Gross, J. J., Saunders, K. E., & Goodwin, G. M. (2020). Mood
homeostasis, low mood, and history of depression in 2 large population samples. JAMA
Psychiatry, 77(9), 944-951.
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