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Deandre Robertson
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Course: Foundation Writing
22 March 202
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Title of My First Pet
When I was 12 years old I always wanted for my 13th birthday. One day I asked my mom if I
can have a dog for my birthday she said yes but you have to take care of it. It is your responsibility,
not mine. I was so excited that we went to the pet store on the same day that I asked. I went to a
pet store and I saw all these nice dogs it was so hard to choose. I decided to pick a Rockwell and it
was a boy dog. My dog’s name was Mookie and he was 4 years old. Mookie and I got very close
every since I got it. Mookie was loving, sweet, and protective and I loved my dog very much. It
was the best gift ever got.
In the middle night, I heard a loud noise it sounded like someone was robbing my house so I went
downstairs to go see. It was a robbery stealing our stuff and I am getting on the robber’s back trying
to get our stuff back. The robber slams me slow me on the couch very hard and Mookie came to
rescue me and he bit the robber’s leg the robber dropped my stuff ran outside so quickly the
robbery didn’t come back to. The police knocked on the door and my mom came downstairs said
what’s going on here. I said got attacked Mookie came to rescue me and my mom told the police
officer weren’t aware were sleeping and she said you okay are you hurt? I said mom I’m okay. My
mom said I’m glad we have a dog for protection and that you are okay. So I describe what the
robber looks like to the police officer. So the police officer took notes said we will come in the
morning to check on you and update you. Mookie and I went back upstairs. I went back to my
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room. Mookie slept next to me and I felt so protected from him. The next morning the police
knocked on the door checked on us and we were fine. They said got the robber handcuffed so you
don’t worry about him anymore. We said thank you, police officer, we appreciated it.
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Jasmin Linthicum
Professor Wright
Foundation Writing
22 March 202
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High School Vs. College
Secondary school is a period of investigation, disclosure, and learning. Notwithstanding, most
understudies don’t know that school will be a completely unique encounter. Universities give a free
climate to figuring out how to understudies when contrasted with the confined air of schools.
Schools are additionally playing a major part to instill discipline in understudies.
School and College time both have their importance in the existence of understudies to shape their
future. Understudies observe schools as to where their opportunity is diminished yet they are
additionally molding their future with the best discipline. Then again, free air with practically no
dread is given by the schools to understudies.No limitations are committed to the understudies at
the College level which is probable entrancing for the understudies. And yet, there are a few
different things that carry on like a bad dream for the alumni and are not faced by the school
participants.
Here we will attempt to analyze the existence of an understudy in school and secondary school to
sort out which is best out of the two. The correlation is done from different angles like the feeling
of opportunity, weight of study, and task separated from discipline and limitations in these
instructive organizations. There are a large number of limitations that are experienced by the
understudies in secondary school like the instructor requesting that they present their coursework
routinely. They should go to each class and can’t stand to go for bunk. More with regards to
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secondary school understudies they are kept in a polite way and requested to observe the set
guidelines of dressing also.
Running against the norm, there are no such standards of discipline in Colleges where understudies
are allowed to meander around the grounds. Simultaneously, they can take on the appearance of
their desire with next to no limitations. The tasks are given to the alumni on the off chance that not
submitted on cutoff time bring about zero scores and not the furious substance of a teacher like in
schools.
So from the above conversation, we can presume that both school and school are best at their own
place. While understudies learn discipline and routineness in school to do their review they track
down free air in College.
Both are significant according to the advancement of the understudies concerning when the
opportunity is given in the College understudies become ready to apply their learning all the more
adroitly. So school and universities can’t exist is freedom for one another with regards to forming
the profession of an understudy.
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